My Sweetie

tedious

 

My Sweetie, I am besotted by your gentle beauty

Whilst you waltz in 

And have all the girls stare

Of course, I am one of those girls

Brunette locks, with lipstick on

 

Yet, my Sweetie, my naivety predicates a selfish stupidity

Rather almost taboo

Falling for a taken man 

My years approaching

As yours become an indefinite epilogue 

 

My Sweetie, I'm still kindling an idealised passion

Even upon your oblivious gaze 

My most painful punishment 

Which is an incurable agony

But, my Sweetie, I surrender to your pain

  • Author: tedious (Offline Offline)
  • Published: June 1st, 2016 14:20
  • Comment from author about the poem: A way of venting about unrequited love. Inspired by Anne Sexton's poem 'For My Lover Returning to His Wife'.
  • Category: Love
  • Views: 24
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  • lysistrata

    Tedious,
    Your ' Sweetie' is for diabetics....

    • tedious

      Ha! I see what you mean. I am merely using 'Sweetie' as a term of endearment here. It's just personal preference.

    • sickmind666

      I really enjoyed your first poem, I hope to see more like this one in the near future.

      • tedious

        Thank you very much. I am so glad that you enjoyed it. I will be sure to check out your poems too!

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        WELCOME TEDIOUS (nice pen name) I love your first poem ! An excellent "free verse" ode with good syllable balance in each verse. This give it flow and makes it easy to read and recite (hallmarks of a good poem !). We all experience "Unrequited love" so I empathise with your poem. The object of our love is often both taken and unobtainable. Love your picture which adds substance to the dialogue. I add a picture to all my poems (please check). Each verse adds another facet to your dialogue. Love the last line "But, my sweetie, I surrender to your pain". Personally I feel the word SWEETIE is very appropriate for an unobtainable Englishman ! Yours BRIAN

        • tedious

          Thank you very much, Brian. I am a novice with poetry writing and your review certainly made me smile. Yes, I do like 'free verse', and find it difficult to stick to such structures as 'iambic pentameters', etc. Indeed, unrequited love is painful, and I tried to capture this in my writing. Thanks again, and I will certainly check out your poems too!



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