Racing Thoughts run me down
without me ever touching the ground.
Racing Thoughts forgot my running shoes
before they decided to run me through.
Racing Thoughts wont give me a break.
A break to be with you.
To enjoy the moments.
To live in what is us.
Racing Thoughts keep me running...
Racing Thoughts keep my heart thudding...
But hy heart has grown weak
& my legs can no longer stand on broken feet.
I know that I'm going to fall &
I know that when I do, I may lose it all.
But when I do,
I hope I fall into trust.
When I do, I pray I fall into love.
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Author:
anxiousandartsy (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I am going to start a series of poems written about anxiety's symptoms and how they affect and take a tole on me. Hopefully these poems can allow others to truly see inside of anxiety and depression.
- Category: Reflection
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Comments2
WELCOME FRIEND - A very interesting first poem - and it's always useful to have an explanation and promise of more on the same topic. I like the structure - modern with free rhyme. The repetition of the title "Racing Thought" within the poem (five times !) reinforces the message and add poignancy. Anxiety is a difficult experience and a challenging topic for a series of poems. However it is something we all share from time to time. Thanks for caring and sharing - BRIAN
Looking forward to your series....You made a very good start.
Can I suggest a couple of tiny changes??
MY VERSION:
"Racing Thoughts run me down
without my heavy head ever touching the ground.
Racing Thoughts forgot my iron shoes
before they decided to run me through."
And something else:
Is it "take a tole on me" or " take a toll on me"?
I am unsure?! Thanks & Don't be Anxious!
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