I lay awake and think of you
can't forget the things you do
and I can't get my mind off you
you're everywhere to me
and every time I get near you
I know you think I'm just a fool
but I'm not a fool
I'm just a girl in search of you
Until one day
you come my way
and you tell me that you'll stay
you bat your eyes and call my name
knowing I'll never be the same
and so you tease
bring me to my knees
and then you leave
leaving me undone
so here I am alone again
loneliness, my only friend
and I am caught here at the end
of what once was you and me
and at your request I would be
a fool for the whole world to see
if you would just let me be me
and love me as I am
But you won't
no, you can't
because I'm alone
in this romance
and I lay awake and think of you
can't forget the things you do
and I can't get my mind off you
you're everywhere to me.
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Author:
JustABird (
Offline) - Published: June 4th, 2016 18:51
- Category: Love
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Comments2
WELCOME JAB - Thanks for a lovely first poem. Our Love Poems are often about Unrequited Love because we all experience it ! I love the structure of the poem it sizzles with rhyme and rhythm as a good love poem should - nice to read easy to recite. Love the subject and I can empathise as I have (several times) loved someone who didn't really love me ! I love the sentiment at the end of the opening and closing stanza. "You're EVERYWHERE to me". Thanks for sharing - BRIAN
Thank you for the lovely comments. I noticed that you tend to leave kind words of encouragement on other poems. It really helps because I've been torn down a lot. I once volunteered on a literary magazine but I couldn't get my own poems into because my fellow colleagues kept tearing into everything I submitted until I didn't even want to write anymore. I don't know if you realize how nice was to be built up like that but thank you again. 🙂
THANKS JAB ~ I work in Further Education with young people (16 - 25) teaching Applied Science. I always try to be an ENCOURAGER. I also work with creative Teens (Art - Poetry - Drama - Music etc) in General Studies and Youth Work. All creative students need POSITIVE feedback. If you had lots of spelling or grammatical mistakes I would send you a private note - OK. Some people can be quite scathing (even on My Poetic Side) which is sad because Poets are sensitive and easily discouraged by NEGATIVE feedback. Pleased you enjoyed my positive objective comment ! Yours BRIAN
"everywhere to me"
so much better than the more familiar "everything to me". Describes the situation to a tee. Beautifully written. Your ex colleagues on the magazine don't realise what they have missed . Hope you have got over them.
I have. And thank you. I just wanted to get that feeling across of being haunted by someone because everywhere you look, you're reminded of them and that phrase covers it beautifully.
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