Remember when we met
Remember when it felt right
Remember when it was just perfect
Remember when we had it all
Remember when I fell head over heels for you
Remember when we could talk about day about nonsense
Remember when it was perfect
Remember when I couldn't take my eyes off you
Remember when it went wrong
Remember when we couldn't look at each other
Remember when we couldn't talk about anything like we used too
Remember when we cried
Remember when I tried to hard
Remember when you said goodbye
Remember when we were perfect
-
Author:
danwood (
Offline) - Published: June 15th, 2016 20:08
- Category: Love
- Views: 30
Offline)
Comments2
WELCOME DAN ~ Thanks for an awesome first poem ~ more please. Love the style of this poem ~ having each line start with REMEMBER WHEN reinforces the message. You sure REMEMBER and you want us to REMEMBER as well ! I'm 33 (and still single) so i can empathise. Your first - octet -remembers when "It was perfect". The second - sextet - remembers when "It all went wrong". I love the pathos in the fifteenth line "Remember when we were perfect". Thanks for carin' an' sharin' Yours BRIAN
Wow thank you
i have only written my poems for mr to get my feelings out so they would stop bugging me and to get that feedback is so amazing thank you
First of all.. great poem, and great comment Brian.. danwood as far as writing to get your feelings out.. perfect way to deal! I do the same. Pain, hurt, sorrow, thoughts and regrets deal better written down than keeping in our heads.
To be able to comment and rate this poem, you must be registered. Register here or if you are already registered, login here.