S TRANGER ON THE SHORE ~ For whom you wait ?
T ell me is he your lover ? He is
R ather late ! I have watched you waiting
A nother loveless day ~ but there was
N obody to meet you as you pray.
G OD knows you're waiting ~ He hears your prayer
E ach day He sees your there - waiting - who for ?
R ejected lovely Stranger on the Shore.
O ne day your Shining Prince will come
N o more waiting ~ He will guide you home !
T he days are long ~ The nights are cold
H e still is absent from your side
E lusive to your treaties ~ Each day as you grow old !
S oon your waiting turns to grief and pain
H e's gone he won't be back again
O bitter unrequited LOVE ~ No
R espite now ~ from Earth or Heaven above
E XPIRE ! Your broken Spirit ~ Leaves you like a DOVE !
Thanks for reading ~ Enjoy the Tune ~ Yours BRIAN
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Author:
BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I have always loved recordings of AKA BILK's melancholy rendering of Stranger on the Shore and the image of a Beautiful Young Lady waiting expectantly but fruitlessly on the shore. I used a rhyming acrostic form because it would limit me to 18 lines ~ which is a Sonnet plus a quatrain ! When i found the picture the poem wrote itself. In the tune there is no denouement which suggested the Beautiful Young Lady expired of a broken heart. Comments are welcome ~ Thanks for listening and reading BRIAN XOX
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Wow! An Ode to crushing loneliness. How beautiful and sad all at once. Haven't heard a clarinet solo in a while - very nice. The woman looking longingly at the sea is a nice touch (very effective, but she really needs to move on). Kinda hoped for a miracle ending for the lady but I guess that wouldn't be realistic. Ha! Thx Brian!
Thanks DD - AKA BILK played a lot in low register give great pathos to his playing. There are three elements ~ The haunting tune (which ends in pathos) the picture (which is also melancholy) which to some extent dictated the poem. She died of despair and a broken heart ~ BUT my muse released her "broken spirit" free (at last) as a DOVE ! Thanks for you comment always appreciated. BRIAN
Very clever layout. I like the rhetorical questioning a lot as it provokes so much thought- Great concept!
Thanks AMOS ~ I like acrostics they impose a line limit on the poem ~ rhyming acrostics are more difficult to compose. I have written a comment about the rhetorical questioning in my reply to NONONO's comment please check. Thanks for your comment - BRIAN
Haunting and melancholic .. Fabulous ...
Thanks CAMILLE ~ for a lovely comment ~ Yours BRIAN
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