why promise something so dear?
and pretend that you'll always be here
why did I believe it?
did you see it was just too easy...
because you knew I was in love
my feelings I allowed you to see
but to you it was all a
scheme.
to see if you could take my virginity.
i remember that night so clear and vividly
you said "Trust me,
I'll never leave."
and I lay there smiling, like a fool.
Because I believed it...
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Author:
A.Green (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: June 28th, 2016 15:23
- Comment from author about the poem: For the ones who've been broken by those who never cared.
- Category: Love
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Comments3
WELCOME AGF ~ Thanks for a very poignant and challenging first poem. Yes it is a LOVE poem ~ but the subject is Betrayed Love ! Despite the subject of betrayal the poem is beautifully constructed and replete with rhyme an rhythm. As I've grown older I have learned just how precious a females "virginity" is and I am ashamed of Men who treat it lightly. It's "surrender" is not only physiological but also psychological which make rape such a horrendous crime. The same is true (as your poem suggests) of females who are tricked into surrendering their "V" by insincere promises of eternal love. Your poem is a warning to all Ladies to cherish their "V" and to all Men to respect it ! Thanks for caring and sharing ~ Yours BRIAN.
I'm glad you liked it! You're comment only inspired me to keep going and get better. Thank you! I'm going to try to get the hang of the poem thing. Hopefully lol
That's what poetry is about! Pouring out your pain into words written because we don't have the strength to speak'em.. Nicely written! Remember, you're not a fool for believing and trusting someone you love. They're the fool for destroying a love so pure!
Awe thank you once again!
You're welcome once again..😃
Love this work agf360 , so full of emotion and regret and I am sure many will relate to it.. It's wonderful to be able to write and share our feelings and emotions and hopefully you will feel a healing for the sharing of yours... A strong message to both men and women found in the reading of this excellent work... Both your works have touched deep...Bravo my friend...Dee
I just want to touch my readers with emotional poems because in reality we've all been down due to love and people in this generation won't talk about it.
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