TREES ~ HAIKU

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  Shahla Latifi June 30th, 2016 10:48

  So beautifully written.
  - Shahla Latifi

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    BRIAN & ANGELAJune 30th, 2016 11:01

    Thanks SHAHLA ~ much appreciated. I always like to make my HAIKU 5 7 5 and also introduce a bit of rhyme. Thanks BRIAN

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  Dee June 30th, 2016 16:21

  Wonderful Haiku Brian, Each one a different tree and each one beautifully portrayed...I am blessed to live near a forest and spend a lot of time walking it at weekends....The tree's are so beautiful and the scents divine.. last Haiku 5/9/5 is this another form of the Haiku and can we use either form when writing one ? Love them all...Smiles and blessings...Dee.

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    BRIAN & ANGELAJune 30th, 2016 18:30

    Thanks DEE ~ for an encouraging comment ~ I am pleased it resonated with you ! Love your picture ! I pronounced IT - ALIAN as only having TWO syllables when it has at last three ! I love HAIKU and I think there is a lot of hype about that an English HAIKU must have a 5 7 5 syllabus pattern. In essence it does not matter ! Perhaps 3 lines and 17 syllables would give poetic licence. Technically they should not rhyme either. Lots of HAIKU on MPS are not 5 7 5 ~ for me the verbal content and the message are more important that the syllabic structure. I could have used ITI which (I believe) was a derogatory term used for Italians in WW2 ITIS ~ OK ~ But most people would not have understood it. I should have been iconoclastic in HAIKU 3 and written the first line as I SHOULD HAVE BEEN A POPLAR ~ I did not want to offend the HAIKU-POLICE ! As you might imagine the rules for Japanese Haiku are much more rigid in both form and structure. Incidentally if a HAIKU is not about nature it is called a SENRYU and is still 5 7 5 An exanple would be Boris Johnson a ~ Tory Clown Gove said no good ~ Boris then stood down ! That is a SENRYU because it is about a person and not nature ~ OK ~ Blessings to you too ~ Love BRIAN

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  Jade_Jester October 4th, 2016 22:30

  sorry, but this isn't a haiku.
  
  A haiku is three verses, no more no less.
  
  The key is to tell a story/set a scene in small and simple words.

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    BRIAN & ANGELAOctober 5th, 2016 08:49

    THANKS FOR YOU COMMENT JADE. This is not ONE HAIKU ~ this is four separate HAIKU each of which (individually) fulfills the criteria for an English Haiku 17 syllables ~ in three lines of 5~7~5 syllables OK ~ Yours BRIAN

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    Jade_JesterOctober 7th, 2016 16:42

    Okay, thanks for the explanation, Its still a good poem,
    I am sorry if I appeared aggressive

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    BRIAN & ANGELAOctober 7th, 2016 18:12

    That's OK Jade ~ There are rules in CLASSICAL POETRY ! If someone calls a poem ~ A SONNET or A VIILANELLE or A TANKA etc then they should follow the classical criteria. I could write THE CAT SAT ON THE MAT ~ THE RAT SAT ON THE MAT ~ THE CAT ATE THE RAT ~ AND THAT WAS THAT ! That is a fun poem about nature ~ but I would not call it a HAIKU because it has FOUR LINES in a 6 6 5 4 syllable pattern which is not a HAIKU (5 7 5) OK, Classical Poetry requires linguistic discipline OK Yours BRIAN