walking in a hovering step-each supporting actor glancing against that hollow thin creaking shell
i stay still in my wall
pictures in frames like hanged men-
dust dressed jars stand guarding there once touched hopes
sunken plants along a wooden shore-cry for the pity that water brings
time throws me another lie
i knew i had taken the outside view
yet in some POE like story-i have never moved
a metal dancing girl stands beneath a grubby white painted wall-
it must be Autumn as clothes like dead leaves are all a scatter across wooden beasts ,
you see i fear the Earths crust maybe to weak for me
and falling through its realms just to go to the shops
so many unread graves
so many kisses from razors edge
so many caesars saying goodbye
you see i fear the earths crust maybe to weak for me..
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giantgentlebear (
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- Comment from author about the poem: guess its a little bit about Agoraphobia --betrayal-love- and the same room for 40 years
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WELCOME GGB (love the name !) MPS needs more peots like you whose poems are bold ~ enigmatic ~ full of fantasy ~ difficult to fathom & analyse. For me ~ as a classical poet ~ this is modern poetry at its best ! SEVENTEEN (a prime nunber) unpunctuated lines devoid of rhyme but not rhythm and reason ! The Earth's Crust (the lithosphere) is thin where the tectonic plates meet and in earthquakes people have fallen through lost forever in the underworld ~ something we have all experienced "skating on thin ice" ! Lines 12 & 13 crystalise your phobia ~ "You see I fear the Earths crust maybe too weak for me # and falling through its realms just to go to the shops". This is a part explanation of your agoraphobia and gives you reason enough to be housebound for 40 years. In the 21st C there s no reason to go out ~ mail order and doorstep delivery. The "real world" is not much fun any more. I can't visualise you "caving" ~ I love it ~ and occasionally (where the crust is very thin) I have glimpsed the "Centre of the Earth" awesome. Thanks for sharing ~ more please BRIAN Please check my latest "formal" poem COLORS OF AUTUMN ~ Thanks B
THAnks
Love the explanation Brian, thanks and nice poem bear
"you see i fear the earths crust maybe to weak for me.."
1.Typo!
2. You know better....😏
think i will put that on my grave stone typo--
thanks
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