Today was the absolute worst day ever
And don't try to convince me that
There's something good in everyday
Because, when you take a closer look,
This world is a pretty evil place.
Even if
Some goodness doesn't shine through once and a while
Satisfaction and happiness don't last
And it's not true that
It's all in the mind and heart
Because
True happiness can be obtained
Only if one's surroundings are good
It's not true if good exists
I'm sure you can agree that
The reality
Creates
My attitude
It's all beyond my control
And you'll never in a million years hear me say that
Today was a good day.
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Very well written..and a great write
Awesome Awesome write
Thank you for sharing ANGEL. This is an unusual poem because when one treats line 21 as the opening line and read it backwards it sends out a different VIBE. Reading it normally the message is ~ TODAY is my worst day ~ The World is an evil place ~ Happiness doesn't last ~ It's all beyond my control ~ You'll never hear me say "Today was a good day". A message of GLOOM & DOOM ! When you reverse it the opening line TODAY WAS A GOOD DAY ~ very positive start ! You qualify it in lines 2 & 3 (20 & 19) and then in line 10 (working upwards) you state TRUE HAPPINESS CAN BE OBTAINED ! AMEN ! It's all positive up to line 15 (working upwards) I think that line should read SOME GOODNESS "DOES" SHINE THROUGH ONCE IN A WHILE (it makes more sense that way forwards and backwards ?) The next lines read positively and I like the ending ! There's something good in every day ~ And don't try to convince me that ~ Today was the absolute worst day ever ! You are more clever than you know ~ an awesome poem ~ when analysed ! Love it ~ Love BRIAN Please check my poem DECISIONS ~ Thanks B
I think this is a wonderful way of saying that everything changes depending on point of view and that we all construct our own reality. Great idea, thank you for sharing.
This is very clever how you wrote this piece. I like it a lot. Thanks for sharing.
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