WHAT MAKES YOUR DAY ?

BRIAN & ANGELA

Get enough sleep ~ by countin' sheep

The amount of money you spend or keep

Whether the weather is good or bad

Your Partner's mood is happy or sad

 

Is your mornin' coffee sweet an' hot ?

Whether your  WI-F! works or not

Visitors who stay and stay and stay 

Clothes that don't fit an' a bad hair day !

 

Traffic jams on the way to work

And is your boss a PERK  or a JERK ? 

Are your colleagues nasty of nice ?

Do you have to say NO NO more than twice ?

 

We all have to work to earn a crust

Nice to work with folks ~ we can trust !

 

Thanks for visiting ~ Comments and gripes welcome ~ Love BRIAN XOX

 

Thais poem is a  4 4 4 2 rhyming sonnet ~ OK ~ ENJOY !

  • Author: BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: October 5th, 2016 09:21
  • Comment from author about the poem: WHAT ARE THE THINGS THAT MAKE OR BREAK YOUR DAY ? Please comment ~ Thanks BRIAN XOX
  • Category: Humor
  • Views: 49
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  • Whimsical_1

    What a wonderful poem, I love the rhyme sceem and the message is on the modern side and up beat. Great proem keep writting 🙂

    • BRIAN & ANGELA

      THANKS "W" for your kind comments. The rhyme scheme is essentially rhyming couplets in quatrains ~ aabb ~ ccdd etc and it is a Sonnet because it has 14 lines of equal length. Pleased you liked the content. Yours BRIAN

    • WriteBeLight

      Great pace.

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        Thanks WBL ~ pleased you liked it ~ BRIAN

      • JustABird

        This was a bright spot in my day, Brian. Great job.

        • BRIAN & ANGELA

          Thanks JAB ~ One of the purposes of POETRY is to bring JOY & LIGHT into our lives ! Yours BRIAN.

        • Augustus

          Thanks for explaining the rhyme scheme. It has been > 50 years since I studied poetry composition. Also it appears that Wi Fi goes out at times in your neck of the woods. Enjoyed.

          • BRIAN & ANGELA

            Thanks "A" ~ There is a lot more to classical poetry than meets the eye ~ but with Modern Poerty anything goee Often there is neither rhyme nor reason ! As for WIFI its good when it goes down sometimes ~ we actually talk ! BRIAN

            • BRIAN & ANGELA

              Thanks "A" ~ There is a lot more to classical poetry than meets the eye ~ but with Modern Poerty anything goee Often there is neither rhyme nor reason ! As for WIFI its good when it goes down sometimes ~ we actually talk ! BRIAN

            • DD.

              This is a very simplistic seeming poem, with a deeper underling tone, that hides the message of the poem. It simplifies our life, and makees us recognise what we have, and how we should be thankful for it.
              Brilliant Work !!!!

              • BRIAN & ANGELA

                Thanks KIT ~ It was in fact based on a survey of things that switched people in the Uk "on & off" during the day. So it is based on how real people perceived their day ~ OK ~ Thanks BRIAN

                • DD.

                  Well that just makes it more awesome great work

                • alanis98

                  Well done Briansodes its a very good poem I only hope my poems are as good as that one day. I have only just started really, and so far really enjoying it. But I wanted to say how good you are.

                  • BRIAN & ANGELA

                    THANKS ALAN ~ I have found that the best way to improve one's poetry is to read the poetry of others. You learn about ~ rhyme ~ rhythm ~ alliteration and classical forms like Haiku ~ sonnets ~ villanelles etc. Poetry is infinite ! Yours BRIAN



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