He is the ocean
Wild and free
He is the ocean
All I can see
He is the ocean
Enveloping me
You are my ocean
Bring me back to the sea
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Author:
clumsypoet (
Offline) - Published: November 11th, 2016 12:54
- Comment from author about the poem: I'd love any feedback that any of you are willing to give me. I am after all just starting out in the poetry world!
- Category: Love
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Comments3
Welcome to MPS! Well done first poem! I like the repitition of 'he is the ocean' . I think you did a very good job here. Thanks for sharing!
Great write
WELCOME CP ~ Your first poem proves you are not clumsy but a Delicate Poet. Repetition in alternate lines and a consistent rhyme in lines 2 4 6 8 ~ very elegant structure. The message is clear and plain a desire to be reunited with your LOVER ! Thanks for sharing ~ more please ~ BRIAN
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