There once swam a whale
aspiring to sail,
yet broke Watch Boat's trail
and felt fixed to fail...
until a wise tale
regaled of a gale
not pressured to pale
to sea sitting stale;
Then, reverse-rigging the rail
helped a deep-dive quest unveil —
a resurfacing-style bail
lets a free-will-leap prevail.
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Author:
iRonnie (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Please disregard the potentially annoying rhyme scheme. 😁 My focus and main intention was to convey the "independence and perseverance" metaphor between the pair of coalescing perspectives(the whale and the sail boat)
- Category: Spiritual
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Comments4
WELCOME RONNIE ~ tHANKS YOU FOR A VERY DROLL FIRST POEM ! Interesting to get the same rhyme pattern (aaaa X 3) in all four quatrains. I love fun poems and mine is also one today on ZIPS with which also lots of words rhyme ! The tussle between the WHALE and the SAIL is interesting and a metaphor of human interaction ! I will hav to think it through ! Thanks for sharing ~ more please ! Yours BRIAN
Thank you! I wanted to mask my intentions(and a couple unintentional literary elements) with the incessant rhyme and alliteration patterns. Also, I wanted a challenge 🤔😁
This is a tongue twister!
😏👻
!!funny and cute!!
Thank you! 💗
Wow what a super poem humoured and witty. Awesome rhyming too. I enjoyed esp the regale line lots. Kudos.
U are most welcome to comment on my latest poem too . Ive been writing for years and readers enjoyed and got Sth frm it so pleez do.
Thanks and I will check it out 😌
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