rrodriguez

"I Saw the Sun Bleeding in the Horizon"

I saw the sun bleeding in the horizon;

Orange and red blood he bled.

This awed me;

I questioned the sun.

“Why are you bleeding,” I said.

“Is it that you're in pain?”

“It’s not pain,” he said,

“It’s the warmth of my embrace. "

Comments15

  • Lau9hin9jack

    That's cool

  • rrodriguez

    Thank you and welcome to our poetic world.

  • willyweed

    It can take your breath away
    as did your piece. ww

  • rrodriguez

    Thank you ww. This poem is an adaptation of "I saw a man Pursuing the Horizon" by Stephen Crane ..

  • Augustus

    Was not that long ago man thought the sun was a God. The warmth of embrace is a great line.

  • rrodriguez

    Thank you... please read Aquel hombre. I wrote it at a time when I was sad.

  • willyweed

    more good stuff RR

  • Tony36

    Awesome write

  • Phoenix8523

    Beautiful

  • rrodriguez

    Thank you, Phoenix.

  • Christina8

    Absolutely beautiful piece! Love the last line of your poem! Christina

  • Michael Edwards

    Yet another great write.

  • rrodriguez

    Thank you fris for your kind words. Thank you again!

  • Dford1

    Absolutely beautiful!

  • rrodriguez

    Thank you Dford...



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