They met many weeks ago.
Have a lot in common.
Outdoors and the same foods,
Other things together fond of.
Love notes back and forth.
The weeks that followed were happy.
Sticky sweet their words for each,
Some cliché and others sappy.
But soon in time, after all,
Their foundation began to crumble.
Got on each others' nerves,
Words under breath would mumble.
One night they met for drinks.
He had one too many.
Sparked a heated exchange.
Swear words, there were plenty.
Dust cleared, a wall between them.
Their faults made up its bricks.
Would there be a future for them?
Would this couple’s love be fixed?
Don’t know yet the story’s ending.
Their next meeting place or venue.
No time right now to finish,
This story’s to be continued.
But, one thing is for sure.
To some this applies, I think.
Alcohol fueled their fire,
Those two just shouldn’t drink.
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Author:
WriteBeLight (
Offline) - Published: January 7th, 2017 07:40
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Comments6
Very funny also very true
don't drink and....er drink?
entertaining dear lady. ww
Thanks. I saw that a lot in my days as a Bartender. The smallest, most petty things or misunderstandings would spark the biggest tirades to send the drinks flying. Usually just before Last Call....:)
The drunk asked the jailer, what the hell am I doing here?
the jailer said to the drunk, oh don't you remember?
You murdered your family asshole.
Ha Ha Ha! Or maybe not Ha Ha. But, still, great story, WW! Thankfully, that never happened on my watch. Did see a couple, once, leave for a minute and then return with their clothes on inside out! True story!!! I should write something about that...hahaha
Great - looking forward to chapter 2
Yes. I am waiting to come up with Part 2. Have to decide which way to go...:) Thanks for the comment!
LOL funny and a delightful read
Thanks so much Tony!
Welcome
Very good poem so far! So sad the a few drinks would put them over the brink. Oh like you said he had one too many. I agree with ww! You did a great job so far!
Thanks! I have an idea for the next part. But, I will wait a bit. Thanks so much for reading and he comment! Yes, he was the bad boy...:)
A witty poem about sad subject, really loved it!
Thanks Daniel! It is a sad subject, but unfortunately, very common situation, today.
Enjoyed the story. Your pieces are always so readable.
Thanks so much Augustus! I agree with that comment. I am a deep thinker, at times. But, my goal is to keep my poems easy to interpret. I do envy those poets, like you and others here, who can really use their vocabulary and use metaphors in such a beautiful way to express feelings, send a message or tell a story...:)
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