I would like to share my piece of writing. Its about the wind.
Wind (short poem)
Oh you!! Unloved wind, you move silently and resides in solitary.
How can u enjoy your sturdy independence? While you lives with emptiness.
Oh mighty wind! Make me strong like you, Blow all my innermost hollowness.
I felt gloomy, when I saw an invisible wind has lonely soul, No one can beat you.
How can you be so robust in this loneliness? Mighty wind! Encourage me to be unstoppable like you, Please blow all my fears.
So we can both say cheers. No matter how hollow my heart is? When I opened my wings to you, I feel fearless like you.
Oh dear wind! This is what I wanted to say about you. From Neha Singh
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Very nice, a lot of imagery
Thank you 😊
It's nice, the use of words make me feel like I can actually physically feel the wind. Good write!
Thank you
This poem is very descriptive!
Thank you 😊
Thank you so much for your valuable comments 😃
Great first poem. I liked the personification of the wind.
Thank you 😊
WELCOME NEHA ~ Thanks for a very beautiful and optimistic first poem. YES ! The WIND blows away the cobwebs and freshens every thing up ! We can be be like that when we let the WIND of GOD'S HOLY SPIRIT ~ Blow through our lives each day ~ AMEN ! GOD'S Wind blows away our doubts and fears and encourages us to be BOLD ~ be BRAVE and face each new day. SOAP cleans the outside but the Breath of our GOD cleanses us from the inside ~ AMEN ~ Every Blessing ~ BRIAN (UK)
Thank you so much 😊 Brian. Your comments really matters to me. I am happy you liked it.
welcome nice first poem. the best way to get comments is to give comments on each and every poem here that you read. loose the S at the end of while you lives 2 line.
u don't want a scratch on this gem. ww
Thank you 😊. I will giv comments on every poem. Can you please explain "loose the S at the end of while you lives 2 line.
u don't want a scratch on this gem. ww" ? I didn't get it
while you live? I could be mistaken.
Thank you 😊. I will giv comments on every poem. Can you please explain "loose the S at the end of while you lives 2 line.
u don't want a scratch on this gem. ww" ? I didn't get it
I still can't get it
never mine its a nice poem
the mighty wind,it can be an enemy,it can be a friend,it`s always care free,
and never knows which way it blows
the mighty wind,it can be an enemy,it can be a friend,it`s always care free,
and never knows which way it blows
Well said
To feel the wind is human. To be the wind is indeed poetic my new friend. Im not sure how i can help i am not educated in poetry but will give you my imput as asked. A poet with a dictionary sitting by a peacfull creek. Has a million words to describe the peace.... A poet such as you and i without words see so much more. A bug skips avross the mirrored waters. The sounds of a vulture calling his family to feast a new found death. Many poets never blink an eye Stare only at the words. You have an advantage over thousands here. And know that a simple poem as lets say the cat in the hat. There was no cat or a hat before the eyes of the author. Yet we see the works of dr. Seuss everywhere. Hope that i helped ...your friend Terry Dailey aka HIPPY4FREE......
A very nice first poem I must say! And if you think about it the wind does move in mysterious ways. I would love to read more of your poems. I hope you'll write more.
Thank you very much for all your comments
You're very welcome!
From your expression I imaged myself flying carefree amidst the wind. A beautiful feeling. A very enjoyable poem!
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