WINTER is here to
stay ~ two ~ three months they say ~ why
won't it go away ?
It's good for the Ground and Trees
lets them sleep ~ while we all FREEZE !
SPRING ~ springs up sudden
this year will be a gudden !
The Birds an' the Bees
will swarm in the trees ~ and make
them look less dead an' Wooden !
SUMMER is never
a bummer ~ always hot with a
Kool Guitar Strummer
Hot Summer nights ~ warmed sunny
time for smoochin' with hunny !
AUTUMN comes Summer goes
how that happens ~ no one knows ?
In town leaves turn brown
carefree Summer ~ Autumn frown
temperature is going D O W N !
There's a reason for
every season ~ I suppose
ecological
design ~ for each of those ~ BUT
Winter's no good for my N O S E !
Thanks for visiting ~ Comments welcome ~
Seasons Blessings ~ BRIAN ~ XOX
These are TANKAS (extended HAIKU) ~ 5 lines each with
5 7 5 7 7 syllables. Because I am a performance Poet ~
I have made mine rhyme for easier recitation ~ OK !
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Author:
BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: For me TANKAS are HAIKU with attitude. Many UK would be poets fine the 575 format of HAIKU and SENRYU too short for expression ~ things JAPANESE are always very very compact. The extra 14 syllables in a TANKA (2 x 7) gives the British a chance to be voluble and add two lines of explanation to that which is often obscure. Why not throw caution (and everything else) to the wind and try a TANKA for yourself ! Blessings for every Season ~ BRIAN XOX
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Very nice Tankas! I like how they rhyme! Very good job on all of them. I like how you wrote a "Haiku with attitude". I might have to try one. Hugs-_Christina
Thanks CHRIS ~ as I have discussed with you there are very strict rules with HAIKU & SENRYU but TANKA are a but more liberal in the final doublet ! The initial idea of a TANKA was to add a word of enlightenment at the end of a HAIKU because they were so obscure ~ OK. Pleased you liked the RHYME ~ but Please ~ Please ~ don't whisper a word of it to my Haiku Mentor ~ YOKI KOKOMO ~ or he will half my rice ration ! Tanka Hugs (Hugs with attitude) ~ BRIAN ZEN
Great lesson and poem.
Thanks "A" we can always learn something fro a well meaning poem ~ thanks BRIAN
Wonderful write
Thanks TONY ~ For me TANKAS are more fun than HAIKU or SENRYU ~ BRIAN
Welcome
lovely description of the seasons !
THANKS DON ~ TANKAS do give a bit more scope for a fuller description ~ Yours BRIAN
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