I looked among the stars to compare
And found that among all of them,
None have the glare of your burning stare;
There’s only one that shines like a gem,
Like your lambent eyes of flame;
And this was God’s luminous daystar
In the middle of the sky like a golden dame
Letting her beauty lay bare.
I saw there wasn’t change in the Milky Way,
All the stars are glittering sparks;
Like little purses of light in the distance play,
Your strong empyrean-blue eyes as a hallmark
Burning bright in the immense universe.
Ah, your burning eyes; yes, a display of fireworks.
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Author:
rrodriguez (
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- Comment from author about the poem: This is a sonnet of four long sentences. I got the idea from Edna St. Vincent Millay's poem, "Love is Not All." The words: compare, burning, eyes, star, ground, change, and strong were used to put it together. It took several housr, but here it is. Enjoy!
- Category: Reflection
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Comments5
Thank you. Your words encourage me.
A wonderfully crafted piece my friend,
(In the middle of the sky like a golden dame, Letting her beauty lay bare).
Brilliant.....
Thank you for your kind words and the encouragement. This is what I'm looking for in my poems.
This is really
Very good rr
I like this very much.
Thank you so much for your kind words. I did worked on it for hours looking for the right words.
incredible imagery in this magnificent and enchanting piece!
Thank you for reading my poem and commenting so generously. Thank you!
All of that in someone's eyes. Remarkable.
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