Still Climbing.
Stormforce confronts the tail-end
of innocence and carefree
calm hurled away, fire's mind-set
lights departure's legacy.
Life in the wake of changes acts
out a merciless course,
composure alters as hurtful facts
faced are being absorbed.
Scarring of hope exposes wounds
and festers turn raw
as lover's lost trust starts to ooze
bile inside heart's disorder
Lies like turbulence cause offence
to shards of memory
and words strike hard when sense
betrays waywardness.
Gathering a last frenzied strength
truth floods thru resistance,
forces entry, flails and quenches
a taste for forgiveness.
Now dry-eyed the lady fights on
safer ground, well-shaken
but wiser and still climbing from
his bitter betrayal.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: March 2nd, 2017 05:57
- Comment from author about the poem: Reading this message inspired a poem on what ways are best when love is betrayed.
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Comments8
lash out first ask questions later? lots of that going around, my daughter reads to poor children after work a day or two a week, they are very needy and all want my attention Dad she says... I said go figure Kim?
Thank you FAY for another poem elegant in both structure and subject. The hallmark of a Good Poet. The sentiments in your poem exactly complement the angst and resolve in the poster. Thanks for caring B.
My thanks to you Brian for all your encouragement - this subject came high on my list of needs for composting a tribute to those who get over betrayal to move forward.
Betrayal is terrible, and hopefully something to recover from. Great job Fay.
Thank you -- your comment is much appreciated. Betrayal as you say is terrible and much to overcome when it happens.
"Innocence and calm hurled away". You have such a unique descriptive pen. There is so much we learn about ourselves and others when trust is violated. Great write.
I feel strongly about issues like this one dear friend - - so appreciative of your support for my work in describing how betrayal must feel.
Love it. A very graphic description of the pain and hurt felt from betrayal. A ray of hope in the strength of her to keep on climbing. Well spoken. - Phil A.
Legacy of light's departure confronts the tail-end of innocence and carefree life. Calmness is thrown far with force. This is so sad that life acts with changes with merciless views. Getting betrayal is painful and this leaves wounds and scars in mind. Offence scribbles memory. Uncontrolled strength is gathered. Forgiveness has taste in life to solve many problems. This is wise to climb up from stage of bitter betrayal to a moment of fortune, joy and success. Very thought provoking and thoughtful poem is shared here with excellent expression.
Great write
how very true Fay.. and you have so very elegantly and eloquently emphasised the point here...
Neville
Thank you and more for you endearing support of my earlier quillings dear friend.
you know I'm gonna say my pleasure, don'tcha.. because it is a pleasure...
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