---mari0

Space

Looking up

at the night sky

is 

supposed

to be a 

consolation.

 

 

I'm seeing

You're seeing 

the same moon

the same moon

the same stars

the same stars

 

But

Looking up

at the night sky

makes me feel

like I can't

b  r  e  a  t  h  e

because 

I know 

that while

we see the

same moon

and the

same stars,

it's likely that

we will never

 

both

 

see the same

moon

and the same

stars

from the same

perspective.

 

Looking up 

at the night sky

brings me 

back down

to earth, 

where I have to

 

remind myself

remind myself

remind myself

 

is a place 

where we

both 

reside,

even though it

feels

like we're worlds apart.

Comments5

  • Hopey_xx

    Beautifully written!

    • ---mari0

      Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it 😀

    • Goldfinch60

      Good write.

      • ---mari0

        Thank you very much!

      • MendedFences27

        Worlds apart, emotionally or physically? It doesn't matter, they are the same. You could be in the same room and be worlds apart. If it is a separation by physical distance, there is no cure except reunion. From your poem I first believed it to be a physical separation (from how you separated the"same moon same stars"), but your ending said "it feels" and so I feel like it is more emotional. I tell you this so you can determine if it reads as you would want it to. The form you use in this and another of yours that I read is unique and original, using space to amplify the intent of your writing. Well enough from me, An enjoyable write. - Phil A.

        • ---mari0

          Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it

        • Augustus

          As the lines of your poem are separated you are separated from your love. Or perhaps you are wandering if indeed you are both on the same page. Love is very complicated. Enjoyed. The form was unique.

          • ---mari0

            I like that quote. That is a great insight. I guess that is a good explanation for why I use space to emphasize. Thank you very much.

          • Poems_

            I love this poem especially how it's structured.

            • ---mari0

              Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoy it 🙂



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