Goodnight to You,
You are forever gone,
Blissful sleep is yours now,
It is eternal, forbiddingly so,
You are forever gone,
Was this ending deserved?
It is eternal, forbiddingly so,
Confusion and abashment cloaking,
Was this ending deserved?
Like a book concluding,
Confusion and abashment cloaking,
Forever gone, eternally resting.
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Author:
PoeticFlows (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: April 8th, 2017 19:10
- Comment from author about the poem: This is my first poem I\\\'ve ever put out for anyone to see. Feedback greatly appreciated.
- Category: Sad
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Comments3
Well done. Lovely structure. Nice images.
WELCOME FRIEND ~ Love PANTOUMS because the repetition reinforces the message ~ FORVER GONE. Most of us have experienced this in Death and Desertion it is hard to bear and the Pantoum is a good poetic from to express it ! Thanks for caring and sharing. Yours BRIAN (UK) Please check my Poetry ~ Thanks B.
Nicely done. I also like to write in pantoum style. I enjoyed reading your poem.
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