Dancing Eyes

I still
how we first met

Catz JCR

crowded bar
eyes met
love at first sight?
Not quite

there was
much liking
me to to you
one way
I had nothing
you wanted

you had
dark hair
crooked smile
dancing eyes to die for

We talked
you laughed
I grumbled

Your friend
bought me a pint.
I was sad
it wasn't you.

We drank
you left
I drank some more
and went
to bed.

Months later
in a punt
random chance
beer picnic
botle opener?
No chance.

Punt side cap removal
I taught you.
You tried it
hurt your finger.
I was sad
you were happy
bandaged hand
essay excuse.

We fell in love
your crooked smile
dancing eyes to die for
My car
and hairy shoulders

Years later

you still
have crooked smile
dancing eyes to die for
now own own car

I have
hairy back and you


  • Goldfinch60

    Good write, may your love vest be always filled with love and joy.

  • Fay Slimm.

    Lovely memories Gary and so romantically written she will treasure this recall of how two fell in love. Great read.

  • Maxine Smith

    Really lovely read

    • Garry

      Thank you. And no-one dies as they often do unlike my wilder flights of poetic fancy.

    • WriteBeLight

      So very nice Garry.

      • Garry

        Thank you. Only wrote it yesterday so still needs some fettling

      • 🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷😸

        Engaging style, realistic yet poetic. Eyes eh. Interesting real life love story. Kudos.

        U r most welcome to review my latest poem too. Pleeez do.

        • Garry

          Thank you.

        • JustABird

          You can feel the reminiscence in this one. I like that.

        • Garry

          Thank you.

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