🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷😸

Metallic marvels

 

I really truly don't know
why
some things under the
sun and sky
attract and catch my
fancy

Quite queerly they
happen to be
hot melting smelting
solids
that melt into exquisite
liquids.

Take for instance heated
liquid gold
molten glass or molten
brass
and to watch magma
'neath the earth's fold
Ooh I love just about any
melting mass.

With similar bizarre
ecstasy and fascination
do I always watch
onscreen molten lava
Gliding in serpentine
turns, oblivious of my
admiration
Ah, I just love all that
golden molten mass

Sometimes I even have
such an eccentric craving
to watch just any solid
beauty melting smelting
that I satisfy this craving
by simply imagining
the honey to be some
liquid fire gold
in a crystal clear jar and
liken it to
a metallic gold syrup in
the furnace burning
As if it were stagnant
mini-lava
right before me glowing!

As for other mesmeric
things
that I find real eye-
catching
are those which
everybody else finds
ravishing.
And they are in all shine
dazzling diamond dust
Magical celestial stardust
Glittery terrestrial gold
dust
in mankind's metallic
materialistic lust.!
But I, I am allergic to
dust!:)

Comments11

  • 🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷😸

    Wow nice to know. w. U had them for real.! I couldn't find any in shops here where I live. Thanxx so much for comment.

  • orchidee

    Good write. Yes, similar to water - it can be liquid, steam, or solid.

  • Fay Slimm.

    Your verse aptly captures the attraction of slow, sensuous melt from solid to dazzling , fragmental mass. Love the image and colour used too. Great read.

  • WriteBeLight

    Yes a Lava Lamp sounds perfect. Very nice imagery in this poem SZK.

  • Gino

    Very nice poem. Very descriptive in the melting of elements,....Love your poem, thanks for sharing.

  • Michael Edwards

    Great read - conjures up such great images.

  • rrodriguez

    This is quite nice... I love the imagery of the lava flowing... nicely done!

  • Adrianna Kjeld

    I absolutely love this, the visual is so appealing. ^~^ Great job!

  • Gary Edward Geraci

    Definitely brings out the earthy volcanologist/geologist/metallurgist in me. I'm too new at poetry to make light of your craft techniques. Would it be a pun to say it flows nicely? Or just having fun..

    • 🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷😸

      That's what I like. To bring Sth scientifically poetic into minds. Thanxx for your great coment. I hope my poems aren't made light of though lol.

      • Gary Edward Geraci

        The "stuff" of 'Metallic marvels' is too heavy to be made light of (OK, now I'm getting carried away)!

      • Maxine Smith

        Love the imagery of the flowing lava, gives great visual.
        I've been writing for a while but still class myself as an amateur, this poem to me is the writing of a professional, I hope to become as creative on my writing journey

      • LIGHT WARRIOR

        Ok.. a month after I promise you I will read your latest I really finally got around to doing so now. Read it 3 times and ewvery time got something deeper out of it. The way that you used colors and shapes and metals together it puts a picture in the mind of these things forming together like in the time of creation...I got a very Genesis lie vibe one time...this is the kind of write that can be interpreted in so many ways and will be depending upon the readers mood at that time, where they are in thir own world..many factors could have possible changes of how it is interpreted. Basically, This write is case sensitive per each reader...unique to everyone who reads it... AMAZING JOB...ANd unlie anything I have ever read...This is brilliant! You are always so respectful when you read my wor. You really pay attention and chose such soothing complimentary words in your replies...I apporeach readers and poetess' such as yourself. TY for this read and for reading!XXOO

        • LIGHT WARRIOR

          Apologize for typos my "K" key is on its last leg!!

          • 🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷😸

            Oh hi Jason. Thanx soo much for a rather interesting review, u sure added to it with your great perceptions and I like it how u connected it to a religious chapter. Cheers

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