A Child in the darkness
Asleep, but restless, he screams
Unseen creatures haunt him
In his mind twisting his dreams.
He calls for his mother
Crying out in his sleep
Comforting words softly spoken
"Now child please don't weep!"
She holds his hand tightly
And kisses his little head
She sits with him all night
In a chair by his bed.
Now he looks back
And thinks that all his dreams are gone
But now mother's left the bedroom
And the young man's alone.
He writes about his childhood
He writes about his dreams
The creatures have gone
Or that's how it seems.
But all his success and fame
That hasn't altered a thing
Asleep, alone in his bedroom....
I can hear him cry and scream!
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Author:
Bibbeck (
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- Comment from author about the poem: A bit of a 'dark' one! I'm not sure where this came from, but written when I was 18 years old.
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Comments6
This is beautiful... Dreams are scary things that haunt the dark for some.
Thank-you Ace. I'm flattered. I never thought this was one of my best, but seems I underestimate.
Ah sometimes you underestimate your best...
This is a powerful look into our nightmares from youth to adulthood . Maybe we have been able to stuff them into our subconscience but the fears are still there lurking waiting for an opportunity .
Thank-you Swingline. Your comment brought moisture to my eyes; I'm SO flattered of your understanding on my writing.
the creatures never leave they just change shape
This is very well done, especially for such an early age. You most definitely should continue writing. Not too dark at all, just a coming to terms with our own thoughts. I think everyone has passed through such a stage in life, where it's difficult to face what is before us. Some dream or have nightmares, some write about them, some do other things. Good use of the 3rd person, here. In 1st person it would have lost much of its impact. - Phil A.
Thanks MF (Phil). Soz for slow response. So glad that you appreciate & understand the write.
Super write.
Woah.. You are really an amazing writer. I love this poem I mean yes it is somewhat dark but like it's usually the dark times we shine the brightest. Hope you keep writing, you got the talent you should let others see that.
Thx Invisible. I'm very truly flattered by your appreciation. It's inspiring too to get your support through this forum.
Oh yes it's an amazing way to put yourself out there without feeling the need to be fake. Just keep doing you. Because trust me that you is the one that everyone wants to know but they just don't know it's there.
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