Baylee

Scathing

You turn over

in your sheets

his scent drifting relentlessly

around your face; teasing

merciless.

 

Finally

in the dead of night

the decision

Enough is Enough.

 

You stumble

still unsure of how to function

with half a heart

 

Into the shower

scathing

searing

scalding water

that can burn the scent of him

from your skin

 

But not

from your mind.

 

Comments7

  • SSCR

    This is really empowering, I know what this feels like and your words really allow others to understand the experience. Really nice job!

  • Michael Edwards

    less is more and this simple work packs a powerful punch.

  • Frank Prem

    I too think there is good punch in this piece. Well writ, Baylee.

  • Louis Gibbs

    Wow! Powerful, beautiful piece, Baylee. The punch at the end really makes it! That is what I strive to incorporate into mine. I look forward to more of your work.

  • swingline

    Takes us into the moment with consequences .

  • Augustus

    I really like this, great meter, and alliteration, out loud it reads effortlessly, with a little bit of surprise at the end.

  • Baylee

    Thank you everyone!



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