Augustus

The Ascender

Who is this clipped wing climber, clinging, caught in singular thought, exploring the mystery above, mourning morning's misery below, reaching, ascending, life depending---on wit, not to slip, wielding incredible strength of will, risking the untenable, puzzling the skeptical, enlightening the unconscious, baffling the despicable, as he rises higher, exposing not only the path to liberty but the selfishness of sovereign design, denying independence of mind, freedom to climb, to fly only to die an indignant death, devil divined in the dank darkness below. Bows aligned to arrow the ascender, synchronized flights of sharp, steel shafts from skilled archers searching, sighting their mark. Slowed slightly by dodging the salvo battery barrage, soaring upward to plateau, sighing, smiling, scaling the height, surprised at the newly feathered tufted pinions readied for flight in this new dominion of light. Unshackled, armed with choice, whom now to serve?

 

Augustus / Seasons Hospice, Houston, TX / June 2017

Comments9

  • orchidee

    A fine write A. Or a f-f-f-fine w-w-w-write! I cheated on the alliterations! heehee.

    • Augustus

      Smile. Thanks.

    • orchidee

      I alliterate if I have too much sherry(??). then it's easy. Every S word starts with sh.... e.g. shay shomething shuitable, etc!

      • Augustus

        A little sherry never hurt. I love it in winter.

      • Fay Slimm.

        Reading the dip into alliteration and assonance you scribed here made my heart sing - - truly a soul-stirring verse which I for one could wish was in print dear Augustus - you have the talent that Hopkins would surely have marked with approval.

        • Augustus

          When I read it to my wife she cried, thinking it had something to do with my current situation. It did touch her soul. Thanks for the kind remarks.

        • Louis Gibbs

          I, too, am intrigued by alliteration, but have never made the bold, beautiful stab at it like you have here. Great job in accomplishing what you set out to do, Augustus! I'm a bit envious.

          • Augustus

            I have challenged myself on several levels, to write happy when feeling sad, a sonnet, 2 rhymes/ phrase, on love and hate, nature etc. And sometimes, rarely a whole poem just pops into my brain. Thanks for reading and commenting.

          • orchidee

            But I has too much sherry (so I says!). Then I'm always shaying shumthing - good acting innit?! heehee. I'm tee-total really, well 99%.

            • Augustus

              Smile.😁

            • swingline

              Well constructed , rock solid , but I enjoyed more the uplifting unification of spirit , body and soul .

              • Augustus

                Thanks for the interpretation. I indended the battle between good and evil, once ensnared by the devil, the difficulty getting away, but was possible.

              • P.H.Rose

                Brilliant Augustus
                Love it !!!!

                • Augustus

                  Thanks. Just read yours about young love. Kudos.

                • kevin browne

                  a genius never really sets out to be a genius but here I think you have captured a genius within your poem Augustus x

                  • Augustus

                    I work hard but genius I doubt. But thanks for the response. I do feel I have plateaued here in part for my circumstances and in part, can I do better ?

                    • kevin browne

                      don't shadow your work with doubt because it speaks for itself. you did magic!

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                    • Goldfinch60

                      Alliteration can be mesmerising, I use it it some of my poems but they are not a patch on this fine write. (Or those of GMH)

                      • Augustus

                        Thanks for the read and comment. Now I need another challange.



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