Some people say a picture is worth a thousand words
but I prefer to
paint
with
words
Watercolor brush strokes
along my tongue
like the
starry night
is painted on my taste buds
Pigments stain the back of my throat
and leak into
My lungs--
I
cough up colors like
Rhythm
and
Rhyme.
Thick oils in my veins,
like
A piece by Matisse
Soaked through
and
seeped into
my pores.
Vibration that propagates
as my vehicle
my paintbrush
Dipped in Dialect
There is something special
about a spoken word
a piece of personality
hidden between
Pitches--
and
pauses
Sometimes I like to add a little sugar to my pigments
I speak--
simple sweet words like
"Will you hold me?"
and although, Lord knows
I love the sound of my own voice
My Daddy taught me
God gave me two ears
and
one mouth
so I should listen twice
I should listen twice
as much as I speak
He told me
new knowledge--
Will never come from your own lips.
But-- he said "Baby,
never lose your voice.
Because that--
is a gift."
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Very good. I like the negative connotations given to paint. Also, I think you mean lose instead of loose in the third to last line.
Haha no, but loose and lose mean different things. The author just accidentally typed another o. I'm like 17 man, you've gotta have other things to worry about than a high schooler right?
Jeez man, you really got me there. I won't ever post a comment again. Thanks for your advice 🙂
Well, as Im sure you know, poetry is an art form like any other. And, therapeutic or not, art is critiqued. I didn't say anything bad about the poem, in fact I said I liked it.
Woahhh Robert are you okay? What's wrong?
You're literally attacking a teenager who corrected a spelling mistake and left a comment saying he liked a poem. 😀
Yo shoes back off okay..
Robert knock it off! The dude stopped now it's your turn.
Come on, How would Michelle feel about this huh? She wanted you to live and be happy not to get all rude and have petty fights with some 17 year old. Please just calm down, talk to me talk to someone.
He probably didn't mean too, He probably thought he was helping or something. He wasn't actually trying to hurt anyone. Yes he is 17, but he isn't dumb just like you're not dumb. Now he has stopped so that it wouldn't continue now it would be dumb if you didn't do that too.
Okay, will that make you feel better? Showing that you're better than a 17 year old? Like Robert come on he didn't mean too. But I'll go check his comments
Okay I did, he only did it 6 times and they were just thoughts, he wasn't saying their work wasn't good or anything he just saw grammar errors and let the writer know about them and they all accepted it with no problem some did what he said others didn't. It's not horrible Robert, he was just telling them his thoughts and they were appreciated by the writer. It really is okay.
Don't you think I know that? Heck, I try and bond with people because of their poems. he wasn't criticizing them at all okay he had feedback and as we want we want that feedback to be honest. That's all he did. So why are you taking this personal when even the writers don't mind it?
I hate to say this but no matter what we do someone just one person is going to criticize we can't stop that. And we don't want to know why? Because sometimes it helps the writer find themselves in their poems they learn that's the style they have been looking for. If they don't want it then they just ignore it. They don't care because they know who they are and how they wish to write their poems. But we can't pick fights with everyone single person who saying something to a writer that is intended to help them. We just can't. Besides if anything, you are kind of judging him right now aren't you?
Okay well I don't know what else to tell you.. I tried I did. I tried to get to you but for some reason you are just on a mission to take this guy down. I have my own problems I'm trying to get through and I stopped them to help you with yours but I can't you are being so stubborn Robert. So now when you feel like talking to this guy rational I suggest you just stop contacting him and everything.
Okay, I'll stop.
What... happened
This is really really good. Your choice of words and the what you're saying overall. Great job:)
wow, i love the imagery i get by reading your words. well done.
Good write, painting with words is what many of us do but painting can also do things that words cannot do. Both are wonderful
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