Copyright ©2017 Stephanie R Schubert
Engaged
In a lie
Trapped
In sadness
Destined
To be lonely
Destined
to be heartbroken
Restless
I carry on
Awaiting the day
That you are gone
Off again
to a new adventure
That is not
happily ever after
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Author:
SSchubert (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: July 5th, 2017 10:32
- Category: Sad
- Views: 55
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Comments5
Well written and expressed
Really well written and the emotion is beautiful. (And I totally relate to this)
Iambic diameter done in a really well way. I am glad that you were able to pull this off.I personally have a hard time being so short with what I want to say in so little words. Usually I would talk about the lack of punctuation in a poem, however this one doesn't need any. If it had punctuation it would ruin what you have here. I am glad you wrote it, and can relate when I feel in a lowly state. If I were to grade this poem I would give it a 8/10. I invite you to come and look at my poem(s), and tell me what you think of them. I always invite critiques.
You say a lot with few well chosen words arranged in a beautiful way.
Mahalo, would love to read more from you.
Good write.
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