NO WAY can I call you
NO WAy can I fall into your arms
NO Way can I ever trust you again
NO way can I forget you
No way can I shut you out of my mind
no way can I keep you out of my daily thoughts
no way can i ever be your friend
no way can i ever stop mourning that loss
no way can i turn back time
no way can i just fast forward
NO WAY CAN I END THIS PAIN
no way out and no way in
no way to escape revolving Thoughts
no way to accept Loves end
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Author:
Laurel L (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: July 5th, 2017 12:55
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Comments7
I love how you changed the capitalization of "no way" throughout the poem, very creative. Nice work!
This poem is utter madness ebbing and flowing together. I know you are writing it to get through some of your emotions, and I am truly grateful that you are. I hope that you feel better after writing this, and it makes me very interested in your own works. Normally I would grade this poem, but as it seems to be really emotionally charged I'll just leave you with that I am happy you wrote it.
Agree with Amanda, the changing capitalization is intriguing. Also like the way your repetition of "no way" re-inforces the statements that follow. Good writing, good poem! Thanks.
Very intriguing, A very emotional yet assertive poem. 💓
Great write. Reads like you are cleansing yourself of this betrayer. Conveys hurt and anger and STRENGTH.
WELCOME TO MPS LAURELL ~ Thank you for sharing your very first poem ! The STRUCTURE of you poem is very vibrant and dynamic with each line commencing with and emphasising the title ~ NO WAY ~ Awesome Structure we all got the Message ~ the AGONY of the ENDING of a VERY SPECIAL LOVE. This is a SAD LOVE SONNET and each of the 14 lines highlights an important facet of your love that you have lost ~ and the fact that there is NO WAY BACK and NO WAY you can retrieve or recover and aspect of your Love ~ NO WAY ! I it so so sad I was crying for you by the final line. It happens to Men and I am old enough (33) to have experienced both the ECSTASY & AGONY of LOVE. I have survived but the pain is eternal ! So I can empathise with you ! Thinking of you Praying for you ~ Your MPS Friend & Fellow Poet ~ BRIAN (UK) Please check my Poems ~ Thanks B
Thank you to all that commented. I was compelled to share this poem because it was too much to keep secret. It is great to have an outlet.
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