the whole lighted candle
i believe i can handle
steadily readily
it wanes and drips
closer surer
now warming my lips
careful am i not letting it spill
till i get it to sit
on the windowsill
with no ill will
just another run of the mill
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Author:
onepauly (
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- Comment from author about the poem: just one of my simpler poems
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quite flamy actually and I love sitting on my window seal too. a warmth to this one for sure.
peace on earth
and in Heaven!
I too really enjoyed this
I like it simplicity and
That you picture it on
Your mind... well i did
Good word pauly!!!!
thanks P.H.Rose I'm not bragging but I think its cute
Clever alliteration Paul - liked the way words flowed into that candlelit scene.
For sure it is a cute one. And I like the simplicity too. Simplicity unclutter our mind. Gives us light spirited feelings. Very enjoyable. 😊 Thank you
A simple poem you say? NOT
I do like the line "now warming my lips". Were you trying to eat it? Or was this for rhyming purposes only?
How about "it wanes and stands...now warming my hands"
No offence, just kidding around here Paul. You should be proud of this one, it IS good!
ha! ha! ha! ha! ha! I like your comment I burst out laughing, now warming my lips. that was a blooper. ha! ha! maybe for the rhyme. I know I'm putting good ones on the forum , but they don"t
last forever. ill have to step down a knoch. that's ok I can live with reality. thanks for the comment.
Nice flow and rhyme. Enjoyed the fun read. Tyfs!
Actually, you painted a sweet picture.
well, thank you
Nothing 'run of the mill' about this poem. Good write.
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