onepauly

candle light

the whole lighted candle

i believe i can handle

steadily readily

it wanes and drips

closer surer

now warming my lips

careful am i not letting it spill

till i get it to sit

on the windowsill

with no ill will

just another run of the mill

poem

Comments8

  • kevin browne

    quite flamy actually and I love sitting on my window seal too. a warmth to this one for sure.

  • P.H.Rose

    I too really enjoyed this
    I like it simplicity and
    That you picture it on
    Your mind... well i did
    Good word pauly!!!!

    • onepauly

      thanks P.H.Rose I'm not bragging but I think its cute

    • Fay Slimm.

      Clever alliteration Paul - liked the way words flowed into that candlelit scene.

    • malubotelho

      For sure it is a cute one. And I like the simplicity too. Simplicity unclutter our mind. Gives us light spirited feelings. Very enjoyable. 😊 Thank you

    • FredPeyer

      A simple poem you say? NOT
      I do like the line "now warming my lips". Were you trying to eat it? Or was this for rhyming purposes only?
      How about "it wanes and stands...now warming my hands"
      No offence, just kidding around here Paul. You should be proud of this one, it IS good!

      • onepauly

        ha! ha! ha! ha! ha! I like your comment I burst out laughing, now warming my lips. that was a blooper. ha! ha! maybe for the rhyme. I know I'm putting good ones on the forum , but they don"t
        last forever. ill have to step down a knoch. that's ok I can live with reality. thanks for the comment.

      • Cyprian Van Dyke

        Nice flow and rhyme. Enjoyed the fun read. Tyfs!

      • Augustus

        Actually, you painted a sweet picture.

        • onepauly

          well, thank you

        • Goldfinch60

          Nothing 'run of the mill' about this poem. Good write.



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