Vastness, reticent.
Drawing absence, submerged.
Sunlight serves a contrast,
Only to darken hollow prayers.
Stolen, be it antipathy or indifference.
Waters are hindered.
Currents, no longer sway.
Outlets of motion, no more tides.
Deceased, alas survived.
Laid waste, here, in reckoning of Poseidon.
Spoken, no reply.
Emptiness, void of cries.
Within the nothing;
Only I.
Recollect, can not.
Innumerable the years.
Salt brought forth the undertow,
Product of a myriad's tears.
Drift along; shall for long,
Reliving the instance it sank.
Any diver amidst this blackened sea,
If thee ever may happen across it;
I entreat you: "Saveth me."
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Author:
Nicholas Browning (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Sometimes you have to force a certain emotion to control you in order to write poetry. The emotion that overtook me when I wrote this was not pleasant, and it's good to be rid of it for now. "Sigh of relief." Let me know what you think, and I hope you enjoy!
- Category: Fantasy
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Nicholas, for me your poem conjured up a lonely man in a lifeboat drifting across the vast sea with no direction and no hope.
Maybe it is just my over-active imagination!
Beautiful poem, I did enjoy reading it.
Thank you for this, I needed it. I'm glad you enjoyed it Fred!
A good read, kept me interested the whole way through.
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
I know we can read things differently depending on our own energy, today that took me to a place I needed to be. Thank you for expressing your self so amazingly, and that you relate to my work.
Thanks for helping me pick the next one I'll post too
You're welcome sir. Thank you for your humble feedback.
Well written and expressed
Thanks Tony! Thanks for the read.
Welcome
That was so romantic, sad, and fulfilling. Great poem! I could read it over and over and never get tired of it! 🦋
Thank you very much. It was heartfelt. I'm glad you enjoyed!
You are very welcome Nicholas!
I think you saved yourself writing this one Nicholas Browning. what a poem full of just beautifully placed words. a genius is at work here I see. It makes my week when someones nails a poem like this. high standards need to be maintained so the anticipation for your next one heaves some pressure your way.
I aim to deliver sir. Your critique is much appreciated, and I will do my best to meet the standards placed upon me. I'm glad you enjoyed the read. Happy writing!
I don't know if it's your intention, but abandonment pours off of this like an echo. I understand why you were happy to shed the emotion.
That's what I was going for. No matter the effort, sometimes it's just not enough, and you feel like you're drowning. Thanks for the comment Heather, it is much appreciated.
Agree with a previous responder:
Within the nothing;
Only I.
Some very powerful thoughts and phrases, Nicholas.
Indeed. Thank you sir. The comment is very much appreciated!
A fine write N. I know I often say that, and it can sound a bit bland at times. I admit I get lost in cryptic-type poems or phrases.
I don't mean 'lost' in 'carried away' but rather 'not always following the thread'. Yet as here, poets have taken your poem as what it may appear to be to them in their own imaginations.
No worries Orch. Your feedback is always appreciated. I love the way people interpret things such as this. It can lead to some marvelous discoveries. Poetry is like that, which is part of the reason why I love it so much. Write on friend, write on!
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