You know your problem is when all those characters come along
Feeding sensations for the ecstasy that never really turned it on
Ridiculous renditions of supreme authority over the fence unseen
Bouncing high regaining the lows which run forever in all alone
Sticking hearts followed waves of untrue when taunting death
Caught up underneath the pillars that crumbled beneath eternity
A love in the light of speed caught the thoughts floating on past
Silently dreaming of imaginations which should show another you
And in hoping the shadows of your sins fall residence in your soul
Fathering the redemption into believing nothing was ever worth it
Dangerous developments pictured in the distance dug a trench
Falling when the knock on the mind interrupted some worships
Walking across a desert filled the sense of never coming home
Stepping in the shoes of the favourite things that are all too few
Disguising meanings in expressions which stood on Holy Land
Who caught some money in a pocket full of all those wishful hopes
Saddened by the interior that ripped apart a family in those hurts
Deep isn't deep enough for the traumatised inflictions of yesterday
When there is a sky filled with the reflections of beauty in the doubt
Saying something with the moralistic view point of causing scars
Sadistic suddenly faltered by sitting down before the altar of hate
When a home is in sight finding the hope of laying a head down
Lifting up the weight that a thought carried a long old way back
Struggling with metaphors of life when a thesaurus answered up
Disciplines need dedication in remembering what and who we are
When space holds the future for time to reveal itself in the glory
Bottled emotions with the wishing well inside of a dutiful dimension
Surprising ideas are joined up at the thought of it being lost again
In which the end is near but far from ever taking hold of this planet
Seeking truth in the matters when a soldier takes his final bow
Pleasing the wisdom even more to entice another God damn war
Words are insignificant for what is being done on Earth and in hell
Strengthening the periodical events of good things coming to life
Brightened illusions are showing the dreams that invited some ink
Created by the loudness of which DNA inherited the spirit from you
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A great work as always Kevin but a tad daunting to read. Hope you don't mind me suggesting this but perhaps a few stanza breaks might make it a little easier for the reader. Just read it a second time and it gets better and better.
it\'s a good idea which I been thinking about just recently Michael but will see how things pan out with it. I will try it on the next one I write but can\'t promise anything. thanks for your advice though, I appreciate it.
if you want to change your style that's your buissness. but ill say they are great just the way they are. and if you do change it you might get a different mode of information. I say if they want to read your work twice or more have tham do it and stick to your guns. you don't have to make it easier on them. let them do that and stop being lazy
it is a style I feel real comfortable in so I guess my instinct is to stick with it. I will hopefully grow as a writer and so maybe things will change through time. if someone thinks it's worth the read twice then go for it if it helps you understand what I am getting at. top tip onepauly.
the way you are doing it now is great. you don't want to change your style. if you do the important information could be lost.
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Kevin you are not only the king of poetry as Kat pointed out, you are the king of poetry marathons!
Yes it does take time to read, but it is worth it!
wow, I'm 2 kings so then I will keep on writing poetry for you at a kings standard. you are very kind FredPeyer, you make it worth the while. thank you.
This thumps bro this breathes on its own really damn good job seriously I'm in awe this is poetic even for the stars
Too many good lines to choose from I will have to re read it and get back to you all I can say is there will be more than one I choose . Excellent brother five ⭐️🌟🌟🌟🌟 🍻 I greatly appreciate this one thank you
how do I answer that? maybe we can all join hands in holding the stars together and rejoice in the simplicity of thought. thank you indeed for your wonderful comment.
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