all i have is this raft
on the ocean its so vast
the horizon shows nothing all around
i wish their were something to be found
the wind picking up and raindrops too
what am i supposed to do
the waves lapping at my side
looks like im in for a hell of a ride
holding on tight
then i see a light
in my bedroom i am grateful
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Author:
onepauly (
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- Comment from author about the poem: just something to play with.
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get ya life jackets at the ready onepauly. looks like you're having a nightmare.
and how!
sinking in the sea maybe?
just ready for a storm. then I awaken. thank god!
I bet you're happy now landlubber?
you bet. the ocean is one thing and land is another.
One heck of a way to wake up! You described that relieved feeling of waking up from a nightmare perfectly!
THANK YOU FRED. THAT WAS ONE OF MY NEW POEMS. THEY ALL WILL BE FROM NOW ON. BUT ITS FAR FROM BEING EASY.
If it would be easy, you probably wouldn't want to do it! 🙂
could be
Really good poem
Pauly......
onepauly thanks you.
The light is always there glad you found it before the darkness of the sea closed over you. Good write.
with just the raft and the water, I wondered how can I make a poem out of that.
hello , i like this , it sounds about someone who feels very lost and alone , the wind and the rain whilst being on the ocean all alone sounds kind of scary and how do we get out of that place with nobody around to help us get out .. nice piece of writing
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