First off this is not necessarily a poem. I wrote out exactly what I felt in that moment and this is only a piece of it because I wrote a lot. I already feel like I'm pushing boundaries posting something that isn't actually poetry and it's kinda raw. I just want to put this out there, anyway if you're still interested here you go.
Why am I so upset these days
I'm violent I'm unsure
I keep questioning myself because this isn't right
Not what a good person is supposed to think
Right?
Maybe being a good person is about not acting on it
We're all human after all, with negative feelings
I'm just distressed and anxious and I feel trapped
I just want freedom without these thoughts
So basically death. But not really
I honestly don't care
I have no motivation to live
But not enough motivation to die either
So I'm stuck in between
And it fucking sucks this is shit
My existence is shit
I'm shit
Fucking hell
What's wrong with me
Because as far as I know
I'm not depressed 'enough'
Or anxious 'enough'
I don't have a real, serious problem
But that's not what it fucking feels like
Fuck
Fuck
Fuck
Fuck t
Fuck th
Fuck thi
Fuck this
Fuck this shit
Damn you
Damn me
Damn it
Sigh
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Author:
ElenaGrace (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I feel vulnerable
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WOW ~ ELENA ~ This is quite a rant about how you feel and the hand life deals you ! But it is not a reflection of the true inner you. You are lovely ! Count your BLESSINGS and you will be surprised just how much you have to live for ! Thinking of you ~ praying for you ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) I trust you found it cathartic ~ when I vent in a Poem it always make me fell better ~ B
Nice Job!!! Remember, poems are just expressing how you feel. They don't NEED to rhyme or follow a specific pattern to make a poem. It is all about what you feel and how you express it. Good work!!!
Good poetry comes from inside and it's emotional, it describes what you feel. You have done just that. It may not fit everyone's idea of poetry but you will feel much more content if you don't worry about what anyone else thinks. It is raw, yes but it is also REAL. Good job.
Elena, all the comments ahead of me express exactly the way I feel about your writing. It doesn't matter what you call it, poem, short story, writing, whatever, it is only a name. The important thing is how you write it. And this one is outstanding. Yes, you do use 'foul language', but that is what makes it real. That is how we think and talk.
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