I stand within my own circle of life
Me the mother, the wife,
A spot on the earth's surface
A point of reference - my space!
A rounded member of the Human Race
As more baggage comes my way my circle becomes sharper
When did life become so triangular?
Moving from A to B to C?
Monotony, life in automation is the key
Searching the four corners of my mind
Was I blind?
To when my life became so square
In a rut, all boxed up - should I care?
Thumbprints tessellated
A canvas of the life we created
As we rub together, more lines
We morph - another polygon?
Life has become a hexagon!
Fitting snugly - a quilt of sadness and laughter
Becoming stars shining in the sky here after.
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Sue, your beautiful poem describes domestic life perfectly! Somebody once said that the only difference between a rut and a grave is depth.
Love the geometry metaphors.
All in all, excellent!
Thank you very much for the positive feedback Fred. Made me smile when I read your comment - not heard that before about the difference between a rut and a grave😂 Very true though!
You are welcome. You mention that you have 5 grand-children. I have 4 and one more on the way. I found that since the kids are gone, are parents themselves and my wife and I are on our own, life actually improved. Less drama, less chores, more time for ourselves. So to use your metaphors, we are back in a circle.
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I loved it. It is amazing how much we reflect on life as time moves forward. We all feel like a mouse in a maze sometimes as we travel each path.
Thank you - I like your analogy of a mouse in a maze😊
A fine geometric description of life's journey, Sue. Well done!
Thank you 😊
Excellent geometry.... theres one bit you haven't mentioned in your lovely piece.... Since divorce i've been flat lining (lol) don't go there, i think your geometry is far nicer! Great piece of writing, a pleasure to read, thank you
Ah thank you - funny you should mention flat lining because I did play around with adding that but it didn't flow as well. Hope your life takes on some shape and doesn't continue to flat line!
Hey i was just playing with geometry..... there are plenty of pleasing curves in my life thanks.
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A very good write, our lives can be governed by the different paths we have to tread.
Thank you - yes we have many choices and 'what ifs' in life!
"What if..." the most resounding question we ask of our lives.
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