I stand within my own circle of life
Me the mother, the wife,
A spot on the earth's surface
A point of reference - my space!
A rounded member of the Human Race
As more baggage comes my way my circle becomes sharper
When did life become so triangular?
Moving from A to B to C?
Monotony, life in automation is the key
Searching the four corners of my mind
Was I blind?
To when my life became so square
In a rut, all boxed up - should I care?
Thumbprints tessellated
A canvas of the life we created
As we rub together, more lines
We morph - another polygon?
Life has become a hexagon!
Fitting snugly - a quilt of sadness and laughter
Becoming stars shining in the sky here after.
-
Author:
sue.evans (
Offline) - Published: August 18th, 2017 03:03
- Category: Unclassified
- Views: 28
Offline)
Comments5
Sue, your beautiful poem describes domestic life perfectly! Somebody once said that the only difference between a rut and a grave is depth.
Love the geometry metaphors.
All in all, excellent!
Thank you very much for the positive feedback Fred. Made me smile when I read your comment - not heard that before about the difference between a rut and a grave😂 Very true though!
You are welcome. You mention that you have 5 grand-children. I have 4 and one more on the way. I found that since the kids are gone, are parents themselves and my wife and I are on our own, life actually improved. Less drama, less chores, more time for ourselves. So to use your metaphors, we are back in a circle.
That's good to hear! Long may you enjoy!
I loved it. It is amazing how much we reflect on life as time moves forward. We all feel like a mouse in a maze sometimes as we travel each path.
Thank you - I like your analogy of a mouse in a maze😊
A fine geometric description of life's journey, Sue. Well done!
Thank you 😊
Excellent geometry.... theres one bit you haven't mentioned in your lovely piece.... Since divorce i've been flat lining (lol) don't go there, i think your geometry is far nicer! Great piece of writing, a pleasure to read, thank you
Ah thank you - funny you should mention flat lining because I did play around with adding that but it didn't flow as well. Hope your life takes on some shape and doesn't continue to flat line!
Hey i was just playing with geometry..... there are plenty of pleasing curves in my life thanks.
Glad to hear it 👍
A very good write, our lives can be governed by the different paths we have to tread.
Thank you - yes we have many choices and 'what ifs' in life!
"What if..." the most resounding question we ask of our lives.
Very true!
To be able to comment and rate this poem, you must be registered. Register here or if you are already registered, login here.