Beautiful is it?
hilly cottages, water streams
fields of fresh green
views you dream of
sheep remain silent similar to clouds,
Im concerned about it
its too peaceful
no one to talk too
finding something to do
countryside life.
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Author:
JamieDayDream (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I wanted to share this on my birthday hope you enjoy, please correct grammar mistakes as well as spelling mistakes thank you.
- Category: Nature
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Comments3
I was raised in the country and enjoyed the revisit. Happy birthday.
Thank you very much sir glad you liked 🙂
Is your loneliness within or without? Would you feel less lonely in a crowd or would you feel like everyone was looking at you, or maybe ignoring you?
Countryside is what you make it. Much like life itself. Nice bit of writing though.
That's an good point when with people I still feel lonely so its both really, sometimes the nature an the views, ect is the company I guess, I think its that I'm more of an city type more going on, so I like more of an crowd but not always .
You invite grammar corrections and I can't see any - all I would suggest for the sake of flow is that you replace 'similar to' with 'as' - great piece of work Jamie
With as, nice one thanks 🙂
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