She sits as her eyes glaze
A bright mind going to waste
And if she had the nerve
She'd say something
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Author:
Naeners (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Super short poem, sorry bout that. Please tell me what you think, constructive criticism is always welcomed.
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No need to apologise about it's length - it's quality that counts and this has it. It's a super piece of work. The only thing I'd do with it if it were mine would be to add a bit of punctuation and in doing so do away with some of the capitals. However this is a personal matter and other poets may well disagree.
Naeners, Michael is right. I do love shorties that say a lot between the lines, have a lot of meaning and hidden 'treasures' and leave a lot to the readers imagination. Your poem is just perfect! And I guess that bright mind is yours!
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