For years,
the sun and the moon existed
in my universe.
Although both never together,
they were perfect.
Harmoniously compatible.
And years before my universe,
they were in deep love.
The stars danced,
reflecting their souls.
The planets aligned,
creating a bond.
My universe was complete,
whole.
The sun and the moon,
lit up my skies.
They awoke in me: life,
and breathed in me: love.
But slowly,
the dark clouds hovered
in my skies.
The planets drifted further
apart.
The stars dimmed.
The burning desire
and the glowing love,
faded.
The sun and the moon
accepted their fate
of never being together.
Then,
all at once,
my universe darkened.
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Author:
Alexa Pineda (
Offline) - Published: October 26th, 2017 01:54
- Category: Sad
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Alexa, even though I think that your poem is very well written, I am not sure if I am getting the right meaning. Are you using the sun and the moon as a metaphor for a broken love? If they were never together, what changed? Why were they content not being together before, but not anymore now?
Sorry, maybe too many questions, but I am trying to understand your poem. Maybe I am too old and daft! 🙂
your reaction to this is exactly what I intended. It's a metaphor about a love that faded over time between two people who indeed love each other and seem to work together but yet, can never get it right. You were on the right track! (:
Thanks for the explanation, Alexa, you took about twenty years off my back! Being on the right track means I am not as senile yet as I look! 🙂
Love the message and the use of planetary bodies to convey that
Im quite a scifi nerd so a fading love explained in this way really speaks to me
Great! Glad to hear this.
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