I'm Staying
I died today, you've yet to notice
You know sometimes I lose my focus
I was not in my head at the time
The drive thru window shorted me a buck and a dime
I ran a light and a truck smashed into me
I could see myself in the front seat
But I was standing in the street
I saw the truck driver checking on me
Then drop and start crying with his head on his knee
I put my hand on his shoulder and said it was fine
But he couldn't hear me, I left And went up the incline
I walked back into town as other vehicles whizzed by
I just wanted to get back to you so I could say goodbye
I saw others like me as I walked all alone
Just as lost and confused as me, all wandering home
I didn't try to talk to them, I had deeper concerns
Like hating myself for never having learned
You always told me to be careful when I drive
If I had only listened, I would be alive
So now here I am, wishing you could see me
I wish I wasn't so foolhardy
I want to be there to comfort you when you learn what I've done
And hope you don't drink yourself to death, hun
I know you need me, even though I passed away
So I'm not walking into the light, I'm gonna stay
I've made up my mind; heaven or hell can wait
I'm gonna spend eternity next to my mate
I know you would advise against me dodging the end
But I only want to remain with you, my best friend
I will be here to watch you grow old
And I hope you move on and don't face life alone
Even though you can't hear what I'm saying
I want you to be happy, and to see to it, I'm staying
LukeCoomer ©
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Luke,
This is heart wrenching!
My sympathies for the
loss of your father!
I didn’t lose my dad
So tragically...but a loss
is a loss. It hurts...a lot!
Loosing my dad was
devastating! Expressing
the loss of a loved one
is so personal and difficult
to do! You did it so
beautifully and eloquently!
I cannot stop looking at
the illustration! It’s
mesmerizing! The more
I look at it, the more it
pulls me in!
This is my favorite saver
from your writes!!!
Thank your for putting
such personal feelings
into words! This is one
write I will read every day
not only to myself...but also
to my mom!
She hasn’t been
the same ever since my
dad died!! Your write will
be very comforting!
Thank you Laura, this isn't a personal poem it's inspired by my mother and father but I have no idea what he really did after he died I just tried to craft a beautiful tale ... it seems I did well thanks again
Yes you did!
And you’re very welcome!
Tale or not, your write
is comforting for those
who hurt and have
suffered a loss .
A fine write Luke.
Thank you so much!
If it was a less sensitive theme wit h the same title, I would have put: Meanwhile - was that you carving into that tree 'I woz ere'? And - hope you stay. I will stay. I'm not going anywhere! (lol)
This is not only impactful and beautiful, Luke, it is remarkable in the fact that it's a rhyme poem, but the rhyme is so well done and subtle it wasn't until the third read that I noticed it. Brilliant write, my friend!
"Heaven Can Wait"
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