Sugar Suicide

thin waters

i let you sit at my dock

never letting you get to close

but you said you wanted in

told me you wanted to swim

 

so you grabbed my hand

and fell too fast

into the black waters

of my roaring past

 

you claimed i should of told you

you claimed you never wanted this

 

your lies came out to play

and you jumped on the nearest ship that day

 

but my waters have now thinned out

and im floating across to all my dreams

 

i guess you never knew

that ship hopping would never bring you to

your place of dreams and easy things

 

so your asking me to take your hand again,

and this time i refuse.

 

Comments2

  • Shadowbox15

    Wow. I love the imagery. Is the water symbolic of more than just your past?

    • Sugar Suicide

      its symbolic of the over-all feeling of my life. So at the time this person fell in I was fighting depression and constantly trowing myself in to past mistakes. At the end of the poem when the waters have calmed and I'm floating off to my dreams its meant to represent how things have worked out and I have things that are good in my life and everything that was once so dark and harsh, like the water, is now thin and easy to swim in. I could of portrayed that better but I'm still very new at poetry.

    • Esther J. Doucet

      Agree with Shadowbox15. Great use of water as a metaphor for life and growth throughout your poem. Keep writing, keep loving, keep living.



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