Shadowbox15

Broken Love

People

look back at their first

Love 

 

fondly. As if that encounter 

shaped their 

entire love life like

 

The beginning of a fairy tale.

 

My first love/ if you can call it love/ we were two broken/ I a shattered glass jar/ & he/ a shredded teddy bear/We slid into one another’s souls/ trying to fix/ each other’s hurt.

 

We loved one another since we could 

Not love ourselves. Suffering bled into our

Poetry kisses

 

And almost-love.

 

I said earlier/he/ a shredded/ Teddy Bear/ his eyes were/chocolate/ & childlike sweetness/ lolled with/pang of death/& torment of/‘I want to die too.’

 

I/ a brittle glass jar/intent on always/keep everything in/ but/ they slid from my glass fingertips/& I shattered my fragile/glass heart/ against the wall/ to stop/ feelings of/ ‘I want to die to __’/ etc.

 

People (I) look back at

their (my) first love fondly.

 

How?

 

Comments6

  • Diamond

    The very nature of it all! Love it too well.

    • OUTBACK

      THE = ( CAT )* = THAT'S = ( LOVE )* !

      • Diamond

        True....Damn true.

      • 3 more comments

      • Justin_Identity

        yeah i can relate on some level. i wouldn't say this poem is fascinating but it is pretty damn good.

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      • Santita

        This was well expressed & written. Your metaphors of teddy bear & glass jar are great, really enjoyed them. The writing is descriptive to give us a visual too "his eyes were chocolate & childlike sweetness", awesome.

        I think you could do without the slashes (/) they are a little distracting from the piece.

        Otherwise, great write & welcome to MPS!

        • Shadowbox15

          Thank you for your feedback! I’m just experimenting with some different formats right now ( that’s why I have so many slashes). I can see how it’s kinda distracting (😅).

        • OUTBACK

          NO ONE IN HELL CAN FIGURE OUT MY* PUNCTUATIONS & = * / ? as WELL AS MY USE* of ALL CAPS* ! YELLING* & DISTRACTING* FORMAT* of MINE* = ? NAH* - I'M NOT YELLING* - JUST BEIN* ( ME )* ! LOL* !

        • tepo

          this is so heartfelt
          keep writing it out young yin
          super start

        • _le.hp

          It’s very beautiful



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