I may be absent for a bit. Feeling really low today so really don’t feel like writing. You lot are an amazing bunch of people. I’m going to play guitar and record some music I think. x
Nine Syllables from a failed poet
A poem , each line nine syllables,
Is the task I have set for myself,
To rhyme would be quite incredible,
I pray not to embarrass myself.
So, here goes .My pen it is waiting,
for inspiration to strike my mind,
Oh God, this is really frustrating
I’m counting on my fingers each time
No, Wait I think something is coming
Almost, I was a syllable shy,
I’ll try it again in the morning,
And to this I shall turn a blind eye
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So It’s Wednesday now, nice and early,
And I’m ready to make a fresh start,
This can’t be so tough can it ?,surely,
I’m quite clever, it won’t be that hard.
So I’m here thirty minutes later,
Fuck all this!, I can’t think, my head pounds,
Not the poetic gladiator,
I’m a failure, I’ve let myself down
I should have tried this as a Fusion,
I could really do with the support
To think I tried this in seclusion
Too much for me, I’ll have to abort
Copyright © Andrew Phillips 2017
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- Comment from author about the poem: F BOMB WARNING Lines two and four where I rhyme the word’Myself’ with the word ‘Myself’ is intentional in the context of the poem. I should like to add that I am also a liar and this was a happy accident of subconscious genius. Nonetheless I am a bit weird.If nothing else this poem will give your fingers a workout if you are like me. If not then I apologise.
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That is awesome that you could do a rhyming poem with nine syllables per line! Awesome poem, you did a great job!
It’s the most fun I’ve had ever when writing. I needed a day off from gloom. Thank you Christina
Good write Drew. I'm syllables-mad in my hymn-poems.
9 syllables I find a bit tricky. There's 'technical stuff' though I have to find the tunes too:
8.6.8.6. is Common Metre (fits lots of tunes).
6.6.8.6. is Short Metre.
8.8.8.8. is Long Metre.
There are other combinations too, of course.
Oh Orchidee what have you done?! I can feel a new obsession coming on. Thank you for this
You'll be syllable-mad too! Dunno why 6.6.6.6. is not Short Metre. The Short Metre has one light of 8 syllables in it.
Awesome write
Thank you Tony. Thanks for reading
Welcome
Your poem is definitely not a failure!
Thank you w.c. after reading these comments I think I agree. Rhyming unintentional, I can’t turn it off.
Super write Andrew - such a good poem with excellent rhyming.
Thank you Fay, high praise indeed. thank you very much
Awesome writing, love the humor XD
Thank you very much
Very good and very clever write, it is certainly not a failure.
Thank you very much.
Pure artwork! Literary artwork!
HC
I never could have imagined a better review than this. Thank you. My hapiness level is boosted
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