Do what my eyes now see?The darkness laden;
My pain adorning it’s broken crown.
Chemicals running through miles of body,
the torture won’t stop ‘til answers are there.
Blood dripping: solace from agonies grip,
the interrogators: suspected sadists.
Smiling sadists together inside the room
means preparation for bodily doom.
The madmen ask about secrets
worth dying to protect. My living, or others?
Morality’s question. The simple answer
floats in shadows. Sadists waiting for their
answers: “Suck it, sadists”, my reply.
Needles waiting for those words continue now my torture.
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WELL DONE SHADOW ~ This is a Sonnet ! I teach the FORM & FUNCTION of Poetry to Adults and they often ask "What is a Sonnet". There are certain basic criteria most of which you fulfil !
1. It must have exactly 14 lines !
2. Rhyme Pattern: There are a variety of Rhyme Patterns (check in Google) or it can be Blank Verse ~ Each line has the same number of syllables. In your Poem 5 lines (3 4 5 8 & 12) have IAMBIC PENTAMETER (10 syllables in each line) the other lines are close and could easily be tweaked to be IP ! It can also be FREE VERSE (No Rhyme & No Rhythm) ! Shakespeare is easy to read and recite because it is BLANK VERSE (I am a Performance Poet) which gives it RHTHYM (one of the criteria of good poetry !) and RECITABILITY ! Poetry is an ORAL ART !
3. Versification: There are generally counter themes in sonnets. THEME ONE ~ Torture ~ ends at line 8 which is effectively the end of verse ONE ~ THEME TWO (Verse two) ~ Secrets ~ begins at line 9 ~ so it is an 8 ~ 6 Sonnet !
I liked the themes of your "SONNET" ~ Hundreds of People are subject to Torture & Interrogation every day ~ so it is an "interesting" topic to choose ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN
Thank you for the comment!
I worked really hard on this for English class.
I just learned about some of the stuff you talked about yesterday. The rest of it makes as much sense as Swahili.
As for iambic pentameter, I compared the poem to my pulse, and it mostly fit.
Thanks again
~Shadow.
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