Hi there!
Oh,
my glossy and pretty eyes?
I've just cried plenty of tears.
My happy and tranquil smile?
I've had plenty of practice.
My quiet and calming voice?
The screaming into my pillow weakens it
...I suppose
Huh?
Oh yes, I'm well thank you!
How are you?
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Author:
That Weird One. (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: December 21st, 2017 18:40
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Comments2
This is quality poetry. Nice one.
Ah, thank you!
WELCOME FRIEND ~ Thanks for sharing your first Poem and something about yourself. I like the positive notes in your poem as a counter to the negatives ~ That is my Mantra ~ "Accentuate the POSITIVE and subjugate the NEGATIVE ~ in Life & Love etc !
Bright Eyed ~ through crying (real paradox !) ~ Happy Smile ~ through practising (we all love a SMILER !) Husky ~ through screaming in your pillow (we've all experienced that one ~ that's what pillows are for ~ to silence the screams !) "O Yes ~ I'm well now" I like that ~ very positive ! "How am I" ~ Well I'm OK too and I have a steady GF (Angela) and we are good for each other ! I was 14 (once !) and being a Young Teen is just as hard for Boys as for Girls ~ BUT ~ Just to encourage you ~ As you get older ~ get a JOB or go to College or Uni ~ you get more independent and it gets better each Year ! Also being a LONER is not a bad thing ~ You have more independence and much less Peer Pressure ! Every blessing ~ Yours BRIAN The way MPS works is: If you comment on others poems (please check mine !) they will check yours ~ also you can build up a Circle of MPS Friends ~ whose Poetry you like ~ OK ~ B.
I really appreciate your thorough feedback! Thank you!
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