FredPeyer

Out of Body

Silver thread into different dimension

Betrothal of body and soul

Freed of earthly limitation

Hovering beyond control

All seeing, pure sensation

Fused to the whole

Athwart convention

Without direction or goal

Adrift in ascension

Of the celestial pole

Bereft of pretention

Life to extol

Comments6

  • orchidee

    I dunno about technical names, but it looks jolly difficult. I choose 'easier' AABB type things usually - first and second lines rhyme; then third and fourth lines rhyme. A fine write Fred.

    • FredPeyer

      It was not easy, but hey, it worked!

    • orchidee

      You had an OBE there? That could be:
      A) Order of the British Empire Medal
      B) Out of Body Experience
      or (C) Other B*****'s Efforts! oohh.

      (C) is the alternative to (A). lol.

      • FredPeyer

        Good one, Orchie!

      • Michael Edwards

        No name that I'm aware of but it works really well - could be a new form - It's by Fred and it rhymes so why not call it a Fredime ?

        • FredPeyer

          Thanks Michael, Fredime it is!

        • Louis Gibbs

          Sounds like an OBE to me. Enjoyed this thought stimulating poem, Fred!

          • FredPeyer

            Thanks Louis, you are so right, it is an OBE! Or at least how I imagine an OBE to be.

          • Renzi

            I got a little lost in it all.. it a wonderful way. Weldone my friend x

            • FredPeyer

              Thanks Renzi, getting 'lost' is a permanent condition with me. I tried a different rhyming scheme and ended up kind of writing about an out of body experience, at least the way I see it.
              Happy New Year, and nice to hear from you again!

            • Elsie

              it reminds me of an OBE I experienced some years ago. Definitely 'freed of earthly limitation'. What an interesting subject. Got me thinking about things I could write about.

              • FredPeyer

                Thanks Elsie, I envy you for that experience. Never had anything like that happen to me. And yes, you should write about it. Would love to hear about your OBE if you feel like sharing. You could use the direct mail feature here. But if you feel it is too private, that is certainly ok too! 🙂



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