Silver thread into different dimension
Betrothal of body and soul
Freed of earthly limitation
Hovering beyond control
All seeing, pure sensation
Fused to the whole
Athwart convention
Without direction or goal
Adrift in ascension
Of the celestial pole
Bereft of pretention
Life to extol
- Author: Alfred Peyer (Pseudonym) ( Offline)
- Published: December 23rd, 2017 02:22
- Comment from author about the poem: Tried to do something different. The whole poem rhymes on only two different line endings. Don't know if there is a name for that.
- Category: Reflection
- Views: 71
Comments6
I dunno about technical names, but it looks jolly difficult. I choose 'easier' AABB type things usually - first and second lines rhyme; then third and fourth lines rhyme. A fine write Fred.
It was not easy, but hey, it worked!
You had an OBE there? That could be:
A) Order of the British Empire Medal
B) Out of Body Experience
or (C) Other B*****'s Efforts! oohh.
(C) is the alternative to (A). lol.
Good one, Orchie!
No name that I'm aware of but it works really well - could be a new form - It's by Fred and it rhymes so why not call it a Fredime ?
Thanks Michael, Fredime it is!
Sounds like an OBE to me. Enjoyed this thought stimulating poem, Fred!
Thanks Louis, you are so right, it is an OBE! Or at least how I imagine an OBE to be.
I got a little lost in it all.. it a wonderful way. Weldone my friend x
Thanks Renzi, getting 'lost' is a permanent condition with me. I tried a different rhyming scheme and ended up kind of writing about an out of body experience, at least the way I see it.
Happy New Year, and nice to hear from you again!
it reminds me of an OBE I experienced some years ago. Definitely 'freed of earthly limitation'. What an interesting subject. Got me thinking about things I could write about.
Thanks Elsie, I envy you for that experience. Never had anything like that happen to me. And yes, you should write about it. Would love to hear about your OBE if you feel like sharing. You could use the direct mail feature here. But if you feel it is too private, that is certainly ok too! 🙂
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