Today I learned a lesson
A lesson that has to be experienced
Not taught
A lesson learned from living life
Such experiences can't be bought
Today I learned a lesson
Today I layed a reef
Today I learned to savour the taste of blood between my teeth
It was the flavour of endurance
Not the flavour of defeat
It reminded me I was human
Currents of emotions flowed beneath my glassy surface
Life wasn’t frozen underneath
A sinking feeling in my gut
Akin to a slow
Almost deliberate penetration of..
A rusty nail..
Through a foot
A pain so hot it burns
Melting the ice sheets of my eyes
A reminder that I'm human
A blessing in disguise
For too long until now
No rain has fell
I almost miss the sound
My tears replenish the parched soil
Penetrating the parched ground
A lifetime making money
But void of emotions all these years
That was until the thunderstorm..
The thunderstorm of tears
Feeling under the weather and it shows
I own plenty pots of gold
But zero rainbows
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Author:
Syd (
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- Category: Reflection
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Comments11
hi syd , i cannot help but love this 🙂 i love your reference to the emotions underneath the glass, the way you speak of the rusty nail in your foot and your reference to the thunderstorm of tears . this made for a very pleasant, interesting and enjoyable read .. the ending is lovely '' i own plenty pots of gold but zero rainbows '' we can be so rich and wealthy and yet unhappy ..
Hi there Charlotte, thanks for reading and leaving feedback. It's not my usual type of poem but I'm trying new things. Yes you hit the 'rusty nail' on the head there. We can have plenty of material possessions but still be unhappy.
Take care - Syd
its good to try something new , and i very much liked the style of this poem 🙂 i hope you share more like this
Great write
Thank you Tony, much appreciated
Welcome
Very good write. Most things that are so precious to us do not cost money.
Couldn't agree more Goldfinch, thanks for reading and leaving feedback
Nice
Thank you Thompson, glad you enjoyed
No problem
Great visual, Syd!
At some point in our
lives, we all need a
reminder that we’re
human! Thank you
for the write! Enjoyed
reading it! Saved in my
favorites as a reminder
to remain human!
~Laura~
Thank you Laura, in a world such as this one you may need to reminded from time to time. I do anyway
YES...as do I
A fine write Syd. I'm not human. I'm half-human, half-guinea pig, as in my pic! Well, sometimes, in my mad moments I'm inhuman! Are we all?! lol.
Lol Orchidee, I would expect nothing more from you. If I were half guinea pig then that would be my good half
Syd, I like the poem, the subject, the writing, and the rhyming. Well done!
Thank you Fred, so glad you enjoyed
Thsnk you Syd.
We are only human at the end of the day and not infallible.
Superb write.
Keep writing
FineB
Thank you FineB, I agree. Thanks for reading and leaving feedback. Glad you enjoyed
I really love those last lines. The whole poem was great though! Hope to see more soon!
Hi Virago, thank you I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I look forward to writing more soon.
- Syd
You need to get published to the world!
A gift of sensitized realism that touches the humanity coded in us and prompts the soul to listen deeply MLH
Thank you MLH. Such a kind comment again. I'm glad you read this poem it's one of my personal......I wouldn't say favourites... but in my view this is as good as my writing ever got, where the wave broke if you like. Now I just tend to write about my own downward spiral. I like to keep myself anonymous also.
Thank again for reading and commenting
- Syd
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