Sweeter than gelato
and everybody knows
her mama must've found her
down in the grove
way down
she's sweet as spring
full in bloom
like angels’ trumpets
all in tune
playin' hallelujah
under a strawberry moon
sweeter than summer wind
dancing through summer cane
in the sweet magnolia rain
I'm just sayin'
she could have been
a circus show
a holiday parade
the ocean's serenade
and I'm amazed
she's sweeter than the dawn
the chorus in the song
of the setting sun
shining on
more brilliant than the day
the brilliance of her way
is why
the heavens say
"there she goes!
shining like a star,
lovely as a rose"
sweeter than gelato
and everybody knows
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Author:
Jamie (
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Comments2
Awwww - so sweet
Yes she is!
I really loved this!
IVe began studying poetry writing over the past few days.
I always wrote, since i was eleven.
I didn’t really pay attention to the
Different types of poetry I just wrote my personal experiences and tried to make them melodically flow to please the reader.
When you start looking closely at these various styles of writing, and then try learn the rules to each one.,
I find myself struggling with words and then counting them to make sure they’re within the guidelines of that paticuler poetry style.
Do you have any thoughts on the subject?
I don't have a knowledge of the styles (traditional/recognized). But I have noticed by reading different poems here, that their functions make can make a read go very smoothly, or excitingly. I usually fumble through phrasing and meter trying to best communicate each idea within the poem while trying to let the ideas transition smoothly, I think?
Glad you liked it btw! And thank you for saying so. Now I kind of want to research styles.
I love different styles and have created a folder of descriptions of them which I regularly dip in to - just posted a mirrored tetractys - thanks for the comment Jamie. Anyway as far as this one is concerned it's a real up-lift and we need that here on MPS - like the construct and enjoyed the read.
By the way Jamie you might want to check out ShadowPoetry.com - it's a great resource for different poetry types although doesn't appear to be active any more.
Thank you, Michael
Thank you Micheal!
I’ve always simply written from my experiences and my soul.
I never even considered things such as “ Styles” and persice structure.
I recently asked a writing coach to review my work.
I wanted his honest opinion and advice.
The only thing is, I feel like I can’t write anymore.
He’s told me what I need to do differently but, hasn’t has anything positive to say about any of my poems.
I guess I just need to find a balance.
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