Maxine Smith

He And She

I’ve had an exhausting day with the kids

HE arrives home and just sits on the couch 

No emotion or a welcoming kiss

HE rolls his eyes back when asked to help out 

 

I’ve had an exhausting day out at work

SHE waits my return, chores thrown in my face 

No smile or ‘have you had a nice day babe?’

SHE expects much, looking at me disgraced 

 

Why won’t he just wash the pots in the sink?!

HE moans like a child ‘il do it later!’

Plays on his phone kicking back with a drink 

HE don’t care, looks at me like a hater 

 

Why cant she just give it a bloody rest?!

SHE appreciates nothing that I do

Cant she just see that I’m doing my best?!

SHE can’t see all the stress I’m going through 

 

These two souls are Co-existing 

Dont they see what they are missing?!

 

Lean on each other, show true connection 

Open your heart, devote to each other 

Verifying love with your affection 

Empower your spouse as you are lovers 

Comments10

  • Sam Cork

    Excellent x

  • stevievize

    This is great and shows why communication on relationships is key as they both have internal thoughts and frustrations but don't talk about it in a constructive way I really like it well done max

    • Maxine Smith

      Thank you Stevie. What a reflective day we have had. Love ya ❤️

    • Accidental Poet

      Great write Maxine. It's true, we usually don't see our faults until after the fact. And unfortunately usually too late to fix it and make amends. Hindsight is a great teacher. Thanks for sharing.

      • Maxine Smith

        Exactly right, hindsight is a wonderful thing. Thank you for your feedback.

        • Accidental Poet

          You're welcome.

        • LittleGift

          I love the style of this piece, each stanza reflecting back what the other was feeling and perspective. Communication so simple yet seems to fail so many of us. You really captured it in this piece. And the pace was really good for each stanza, plus the use of colour again as symbolic for each person. A fine write. :)

          • Maxine Smith

            Thank you so much for the lovely review Hun. Your right, communication is so simple, yet it’s the one element that fails on so many levels if we let it.

          • LukeCoomer

            Wow this is great and unexpected! Unexpected is good keeps people on their toes

            • Maxine Smith

              Thank you so much Luke, really appreciate your feedback.
              You should try my fusion ‘How do you like it?’ Love to read your spin on it.

            • BRIAN & ANGELA

              WOW MAXINE ~ THIS REALLY IS A COLLABORATION POEM ! The Battle of the Sexes is a MILLION YEAR conflict due to the failure of Partners to read each others minds ~ a little give & take would solve most problems. I have a FEMALE FRIEND who is a Relate Counsellor and she tells me most Couple Scenarios are like you have described ! I'm 34 and have never been married but sadly some of my "Peers" have already split up because they didn't communicate ! Love the way you have presented the Poem in PINK & BLUE ! It reads like a relate scenario !
              VERSE 1 The KIDS !
              V 2 His WORK
              V 3 The chores (and drinking ?}
              V 4 NAGGING ! (and his Work stress !)
              V 5 & 6 "Two souls co-existing
              but apart" ! NOT sharing & caring.
              In a partnership we should love
              each other and empower each other
              ANGELA & I do in our engagement !

              Thanks for posting a great poem in Structure & Subject
              Also a great photo looking suitably bemused !
              Yours as always ~ FRIEND BRIAN !

              • Maxine Smith

                Thank you so much for th appreciation Brian, so pleased you like it.

              • Christina8

                I like this a lot in the way that you wrote it. It's probably why so many relationships don't work out. The break down of communication. After many years of marriage, you hit the nail on the head with "empower your spouse!"

                • Maxine Smith

                  Communication is key 100% you are rihjneed Christina, thank you for your lovely review.

                • Goldfinch60

                  Very good write Maxine and this sort of thing happens in marriages.
                  What is so important is that you must talk to each other and always show your love to each other.
                  My wife and I have been doing this for many, many years and our love is still growing and resentment of each other does not exist.

                  • Maxine Smith

                    That is just lovely to hear Gold. Being open, honest and supportive of one another is crucial indeed.

                  • E-Poems

                    I loveeeee this maxine! Really love poems that look at the opposits perspectives. Especially if it is well written!!

                    I look forward to reading more :)

                    Peace and Love ~ E

                    • Maxine Smith

                      Thank you so much, very pleased you like it.

                    • tepo

                      Outstanding
                      Not many can see things from both sides
                      Let alone write it
                      An honour to read

                      • Maxine Smith

                        Such wonderful feedback, thank you so much Tepo.



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