Raft of reeds

dusk arising



i cant stand lies
because i never suspect they're there
until its too late
and something precious is broken

like our bond
once so genuine, now afloat upon
a raft of reeds
falling apart upon your waves

  • Author: dusk arising (Offline Offline)
  • Published: May 14th, 2018 00:02
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  • Goldfinch60

    Very good emotive write, those who lie remove any trust that may have been with them.

  • orchidee

    A fine write dusk.

  • Lorna

    Such a clever description of love and lies as a frail raft Dusk - and I love being reminded of Kon Tiki (which actually held up pretty well for most of the journey)....

  • SLR

    You were right dusk, our minds were running on the same thread today. Love the last line 'a raft of reeds falling apart upon your waves' .

  • FineB

    Thank you Duskarising

    Powerful stuff.

    Keep writing
    FineB

  • Poetic Dan

    Brilliantly expressed my friend

  • HangingbyaHalo

    It hurt to read this, I definitely relate having built a beautiful boat to watch it fall apart. Quite beautifully done.

  • Jane Frye

    Powerful poem. Thanks for sharing it.

  • Neville

    I am with you on this one.. a good reed...... N



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