Hope your getting my messages. I don't know why I can't let you go stop thinking about you I don't know if I Love you or its just lust but it hasn't went away. I half think I'm still texting this number because I think your not getting them and I'm able to speak freely. I wrote a beautiful deep poem a few days ago it wasn't specifically about you its was about real love it inspired me to open up and say and write all the beautiful meaningful things I think. I don't mean to be so hard all the time. I wonder if you're going to feel me through my words, this message reads like a poem not on purpose.
- Author: Lovely brown skin ( Offline)
- Published: June 8th, 2018 07:15
- Category: Love
- Views: 19
Comments3
This is a good piece. May I give you some positive, constructive, and possibly helpful criticism?
Persistence is key
Yes go ahead
Maybe you should break up each sentence more.
Ex.
Sentence. - new line
Sentence. - new line
Sentence. - new line
Sentence. - new line
...or something of that nature.
It makes it, um, easier to read, and more organized. It also flows better.
Again, you have a great creative mind. Do not change it.
Persistence is key.
2 more comments
HELLO FRIEND ~ Love your second Poem and Yes you are getting through beautifully ! I do feel you through your words and Yes it really is a LOVE POEM ~ Yours BRIAN ~ Please check my odd odes ~ Thanks B !
Thank you and I will check out your poems
Constructive advice offered.... follow advice as given by ForeverJesus6.
Look at how other poets do it... there are plenty on here, good idea to read some.
Thank you for the advice. did you like the poem
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