SLR

Calling on angels

The silence fills the room,

Neither knowing what to do.

We both know that it's over,

But too scared to say we're through.

 

So we're calling on angels,

Hoping they'll heal the aching,

Because the chance that we're taking,

Could end with two hearts breaking.

 

I look into your eyes,

As tears roll down my face.

Knowing the time has come,

To go our separate ways.

 

So we're calling on angels,

Hoping they'll heal the aching,

Because the chance that we're taking,

Could end with two hearts breaking.

 

I can feel my heart die

As you walk away from me,

And I pray that I can make it,

Because it hurts to be free.

 

So I'm calling on angels,

Hoping they'll heal the aching,

Because the chance that I'm taking,

Could end with my heart breaking.

 

Comments5

  • Goldfinch60

    Very good lovelorn write and song.

    • SLR

      Thank you so much! I was heartbroken when I wrote it. I'm glad to say that it worked out though.

    • orchidee

      A fine write SLR.

      • SLR

        Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

      • tepo

        Agreed
        Could almost hear a tune
        Up there with your best
        Great sad write

        • SLR

          Thank you. I wondered if I should take the chorus out, if it would sound too repetitive as a read, since there isn't any music to break it up some but this is how I wrote it so I just decided to explain that it's actually a song. Your comment makes me wonder what tune you would hear. Maybe something slow and melancholy? Thank you for your kind comments! :-)

        • Frogspoetry

          very good,it conveys the pain we feel when someone we love walk away from us.

          • SLR

            Thank you. That's it exactly. I'm glad you were able to relate to it.

            • Frogspoetry

              I seem to be able to relate to all of your work.great minds think alike they always say.

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            • Candlewitch

              hello,

              very smooth flow...a poignant and meaningful write! good lyrics :)

              *hugs, Cat

              • SLR

                Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.



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